Nowadays, people have to work 8 hours every day. So, they have limited time to spend with their families and especially their children. Furthermore, it is crucial point for them how to plan for their rest time. Some people prefer doing some things related to schoolwork to playing games or sports with their children. From my perspective, I believe playing games or sports with children is more important for both parents and children. I will elaborate on my point through two reasons.
The first reason to be mentioned is that parents and children need to organize some interesting activities for themselves to release their tension and stress. Parents always have work pressure and children have stress due to their exams and assignments, too. So, they can reduce their tension by playing some games or sports with each other. For example, I always have a lot of stress from starting to ending of every term at university. Because my major very hard to understand so I always worry about my exams and my scores. But, my father always try to help me to decrease my stress. Furthermore, we play chess every night after he comes back to home because he knows I love playing chess. After that, I really have a perfect feeling before sleeping and I do not think about my courses anymore. As you can see, have fun playing games or every interesting activities not only reduces children's tension and stress but also helps parents to diminish their work pressure.
The second reason is that schools always control things related to children 'schoolwork. So, it is unnecessary for parents to check their children all the time. Children always try to do their best to receive high mark; also, teachers help them in this way. Because, schools know this subject that parents have no enough time to check their children. So, they always try to control students more and more. Parents also can control their children but they do not need to worry about this subject.
To make a long story short, I believe that it is better for parents to have fun with their children because they need to release their tension and stress due to their works and schoolwork; also, schools always control children 'schoolwork in right way. Based on these reasons I suggest everyone to have fun time with their families.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 258, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...; also, teachers help them in this way. Because, schools know this subject that parents...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, really, second, so, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 8.0752688172 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1904.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 394.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83248730964 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45527027702 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.39381412264 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.456852791878 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 557.1 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.6233232219 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.7826086957 100.406767564 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1304347826 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.69565217391 5.45110844103 49% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.323782616242 0.236089414692 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.109545164659 0.076458572812 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0763643200253 0.0737576698707 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.231476594177 0.150856017488 153% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0572211009289 0.0645574589148 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 11.7677419355 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.8 8.01818996416 85% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 86.8835125448 67% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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