TPO-44 - Independent Writing Task Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing th

Nowadays, the right way of upbringing children is considered as a vital issue. So, many psychological and clinical researches have been conducted to evaluate different methods of growing children and education systems for children. Traditionally, one of the most important aspects of children life is the emotional bond between them and their parents. In my opinion, the limited time of busy parents should be spent over having fun and playing sports and games with their children because of some reasons, which three of them are as follow.

First, most of the psychologists state that, parents should create an intensive emotional bond with their children, as a result, children can truly trust in their parents and consider them as their best friends. Once such a great relationship between parents and their children is created, children would be more comfortable with their parents and let them know more about themselves, which makes it less possible that children expose to dangerous and potential risky situations.

Second, according to researches conducted over the learning process of children, a great portion of the learning process happens while playing different games, sports and having fun. For example, while learning to play chess, children learn the logical movements and the exact meaning of act and consequences of the act.

Furthermore, it has been proved that, many of the great memories that a person can remember in his or her adolescence and later, are those good memories they made with their parents. This means, providing the emotional necessities of children through playing games and sports with them, can help us to prevent shaping any kind of obsesses in them.

Additionally, by taking all this into account, I intensively support spending limited time of parents over playing with children rather than working on schoolwork. This altitude, not only helps to improve the learning process of children, but also results in creating strong emotional bond between parents and children, which is highly recommended.

Votes
Average: 7.6 (1 vote)
Essay Categories
Essays by the user:

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 531, Rule ID: AS_FOLLOW[1]
Message: Did you mean 'as follows'?
Suggestion: as follows
...f some reasons, which three of them are as follow. First, most of the psychologists s...
^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, second, so, while, for example, kind of, as a result, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1732.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 323.0 407.700716846 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.36222910217 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23936324884 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71529206741 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.557275541796 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 498.6 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 45.1358289561 48.9658058833 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 144.333333333 100.406767564 144% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.9166666667 20.6045352989 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.5 5.45110844103 156% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.219770001786 0.236089414692 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0867585392089 0.076458572812 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0643263514253 0.0737576698707 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124025220708 0.150856017488 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0518365190725 0.0645574589148 80% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.3 11.7677419355 147% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.1 10.9000537634 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

---------------------

Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.