TPO 45. Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives.
Contemporary human lives in a sophisticated world where changing is acquiring at a galloping rate. thus, family relationships are influenced by this fast-pace changes too. The controversial question which arises here is whether children are more independent nowadays in compare with the past, and make all of their decisions individually. As far as I am concerned, young people have an autonomous life, and make all of their decisions without their families helps. It is my firm belief that they do not depended for a number of reasons, and I will develop these ideas in the subsequent paragraphs.
To being with, one should take into account the fact that technology is being developed in these three decades, and strongly change families life styles. No one can deny that all young children are familiar with internet and computer, yet their families do not have enough knowledge about media. therefore, they can manage their task without their family because they are accomplished in computer skills. In contrast, most of the children was dependent since their families were familiar with the situations in the past, for their assist can have tremendous effects on their children life. my own experience is a convincing answer. when I was a freshman I was working as an intern for local magazine that was adjacent to my home. I were such an adepted person in computer, and my boss was glad that I am familiar with technology. In the following year when I promoted, I had to manage more huge tasks, and that was hard for me, but I percieved I have to resolved this issues without my family and never talked to them because they were amateurish with this new technology. Had I consulted with my family, I would not have become success as they were not familiar with media.
The second remarkable reason is that children struggling with their education rather than doing irrelevant activities. As a result, they have plenty of information about status quo in country, so they can examine the condition and make their best decisions without their parents help. my opinion on this matter has been profoundly influenced by my own personal experience. when I was seventeen, I had a prestiges high school. Not only did I learn wide range of courses, but also I analyzed the economics, politics, environmental problems with my teachers. thus, I had a significant knowledge about issues, so I was such an autonomous person that make all of my decisions alone because I had a robustness educational backgrounds.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that children are independent nowadays because they are skillful in computer and media and because they have a high quality of educations that help them decide alone.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, second, so, therefore, thus, in conclusion, in contrast, of course, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 15.1003584229 179% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 71.0 43.0788530466 165% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2269.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 452.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01991150442 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61088837703 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83889732912 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.497787610619 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 717.3 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 9.0 1.86738351254 482% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.3488363596 48.9658058833 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.047619048 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5238095238 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.47619047619 5.45110844103 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.240386655166 0.236089414692 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0734466254849 0.076458572812 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0723296910664 0.0737576698707 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148458646073 0.150856017488 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0879158790448 0.0645574589148 136% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 86.8835125448 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.