TPO-45 - Integrated Writing Task Any student of paleontology will be struck by the fact that a great many animals of the past were considerably larger than they are today. This holds true for species ranging from dinosaurs to most mammals. Just why they w

The reading and listening are both about existing of bees in 200 millions years ago.The author of reading declares that bees did not exist because any fossil of bees have not been discoverd.The lecture casts doubt on the claims made in the article.He thinks that it is not perfect reason to repudiate of bees existing.
firstly,Although author of reading claims that incipient fossil of bees belong to 100milion years old,The professor counters that argument by asserting that trees release a liquid matter that cause to omit fossil consequently bees could not preserve them.
Therefor,While the reading mentions that there is tightly relationship between flowering plants and bees.Bees feed on flowering plants and these plants revealed on earth 125milions years ago,thats why bees could not live 200 million years ago.The lecturer insist that the bees could feed on nonflowering plants such as pintry and fens and when flowering plants was evolved they change their food form nonflowering plants to flowering plants.
The last but not least,In contrast to reading ,which claims that fossilize structures disclosed are similar to nest chamber constructed by modern bees.The lecture states that these chambers are made by chemical material which are water proof.on the other hand, there were some water proof material in fossilize structure.

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Average: 0.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: The
...sting of bees in 200 millions years ago.The author of reading declares that bees di...
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... fossil of bees have not been discoverd.The lecture casts doubt on the claims made ...
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... fossil of bees have not been discoverd.The lecture casts doubt on the claims made ...
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...doubt on the claims made in the article.He thinks that it is not perfect reason t...
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...laims made in the article.He thinks that it is not perfect reason to repudiate of...
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... reason to repudiate of bees existing. firstly,Although author of reading claims that ...
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... to repudiate of bees existing. firstly,Although author of reading claims that incipient...
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...il of bees belong to 100milion years old,The professor counters that argument by ass...
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...nship between flowering plants and bees.Bees feed on flowering plants and these plan...
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...s revealed on earth 125milions years ago,thats why bees could not live 200 million yea...
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...es could not live 200 million years ago.The lecturer insist that the bees could fee...
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...live 200 million years ago.The lecturer insist that the bees could feed on nonflowerin...
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...e their food form nonflowering plants to flowering plants. The last but not leas...
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...lowering plants. The last but not least,In contrast to reading ,which claims that ...
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...nest chamber constructed by modern bees.The lecture states that these chambers are ...
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...nest chamber constructed by modern bees.The lecture states that these chambers are ...
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Suggestion: waterproof
...are made by chemical material which are water proof.on the other hand, there were some wate...
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Line 4, column 277, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled as one.
Suggestion: waterproof
...roof.on the other hand, there were some water proof material in fossilize structure.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, firstly, so, while, in contrast, such as, in contrast to, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 43.0788530466 39% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 52.1666666667 50% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalization wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1136.0 1977.66487455 57% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 209.0 407.700716846 51% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.43540669856 4.8611393121 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.80221413058 4.48103885553 85% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66146578135 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 124.0 212.727598566 58% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.593301435407 0.524837075471 113% => OK
syllable_count: 323.1 618.680645161 52% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 9.59856630824 10% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 4.0 20.6003584229 19% => Need more sentences, or put a space between two sentences.
Sentence length: 52.0 20.1344086022 258% => Sentence length is too long
Sentence length SD: 67.6364361864 48.9658058833 138% => OK
Chars per sentence: 284.0 100.406767564 283% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 52.25 20.6045352989 254% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 25.25 5.45110844103 463% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 21.0 5.5376344086 379% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 11.8709677419 8% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0271925078813 0.236089414692 12% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0142131407357 0.076458572812 19% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0121030750956 0.0737576698707 16% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0142131407357 0.150856017488 9% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0121030750956 0.0645574589148 19% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 30.3 11.7677419355 257% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 27.16 58.1214874552 47% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 22.4 10.1575268817 221% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 15.16 10.9000537634 139% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.3 8.01818996416 128% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 86.8835125448 62% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 10.002688172 180% => OK
gunning_fog: 22.8 10.0537634409 227% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 23.0 10.247311828 224% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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