TPO 45 TASK 2 WRITING:
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Although the young generation always depends on their parents, this adherence has been changed in recent years. In the past, the method used in the educational system, as well as parents’ behavior was not the same as today. The Father of a family made a final decision on each topic, and teachers did not allow students to comment on a topic at school. However, with the development of technology and using worldwide webs, this trend has drastically been altered. Nowadays, children are able to increase their knowledge in a wide variety of subjects in a way that they can make decisions about their own lives independently. Moreover, Thanks to social connections that children experience in society, school, and the social network children’s confidence have more increased than the previous generation. In my opinion, these two specific alterations in the young generation's life will lead to they act more independently in decision making than before. In the following, I will elaborate more on this issue.
First, in making independent decisions, self-confidence plays a significant role. In fact, the more confident a person is, the more independent decisions they can make. A high confident child can make a correct decision without fear of the consequences of it. For example, recent researches show that today's lifestyle has made that children’s dependence on their parents in most areas has strongly been reduced in comparison to the previous generations. Most of the children that participated in these researches said that they are able to make a decision independently since they have the necessary confidence for making independent decisions. As far as I am concerned, a child‘s self-confidence compared to previous generations has grown in the right direction, and this is why the children of our generation can independently decide on many issues in their lives without worry and fear.
Second, since children’s information and knowledge were limited in the past, parents thought that they should control and manage their children's lives. In contrast, recently, the method that the educational system has used in schools, and the way parents have treated their children has caused children to feel they have control over their lives. For example, many parenting methods encourage parents to give their children different responsibilities. This responsibility can begin with giving a child small choices in his or her life. As a result, it teaches them self-motivation as they have the freedom to find their own reasons to achieve. Therefore, increasing the awareness of children and parents, which has been the result of years of effort in the education system, has caused children to show a more independent personality and as a result, they can make decisions independently of their parents.
In conclusion, regarding the points mentioned above, benefiting high confidence in one side and quick access to information on the other side prompt the young generation to make more decisive decisions than the past. And this independent decision has positive results such as it promotes confidence and self-esteem as well as motivation and perseverance in school.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 864, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'generations'' or 'generation's'?
Suggestion: generations'; generation's
...e two specific alterations in the young generations life will lead to they act more indepen...
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Line 2, column 302, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'todays'' or 'today's'?
Suggestion: todays'; today's
...or example, recent researches show that todays lifestyle has made that children’s depe...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, moreover, regarding, second, so, therefore, well, as to, for example, in conclusion, in contrast, in fact, such as, as a result, as well as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 72.0 52.1666666667 138% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 8.0752688172 272% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2689.0 1977.66487455 136% => OK
No of words: 503.0 407.700716846 123% => OK
Chars per words: 5.34592445328 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.73578520332 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.08069892463 2.67179642975 115% => OK
Unique words: 239.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.475149105368 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 828.0 618.680645161 134% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.137618962 48.9658058833 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.227272727 100.406767564 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8636363636 20.6045352989 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.90909090909 5.45110844103 145% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.252338934413 0.236089414692 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0844114787177 0.076458572812 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0535545998823 0.0737576698707 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.170051394064 0.150856017488 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0361519527935 0.0645574589148 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 11.7677419355 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.05 10.9000537634 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.59 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 123.0 86.8835125448 142% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.