TPO-46 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.Use specific reasons and exam

By and large, it is established that the celebrities always have had a great influence on their fan's lives. Are these fans mostly adults or youngsters I believe they mostly consist of young people. In the following paragraphs, I will delve into my most prominent reasons for this viewpoint.
To begin with, celebrities are some successful people, who have become successful sometimes despite their hard life issues and conditions. Success and prosperous is something we are all searching for in our own lives. The way to get to our own fulfillment is diverse from one to another although there are sometimes some same situations but, the whole thing is different. Adults have found their way in life and know how their lives or their attitudes work so it is unlikely that they look for a sample in celebrities but youngsters are the ones who are looking for others to learn from their experiences. Thus, this lack of experience in life is the brightest reason why are they so into some celebrities. They look for someone who has been gone throw all the way they are planning to go and since celebrities are the ones with an open life they are the chosen samples. I say this upon my own experience throw my younger sister she follows lots of celebrities in her social media and their fan pages and it is vivid that she worships them like a god because of the conviction she has that they are the ones who get have everything in they want in their lives. I in the other hand believe the success is something inside people and if I wanted to have a sample for my life it would be google, amazoon and facebook companies CEOs rather than some celebrities.
Other thing that worth saying a word about it here is that youngsters always have a tendency to like what there friends like or follow what most of people follow in their age and celebrreties have always been a number one highschool new and talking topic. Forthur more they sometimes have this tendency not discretionary, i mean imagine a highschool girl who wants to have some firends for having a propper conversation with others she must at least have some thing in common and that thing might be an interest they can share about a famous poeple. extrapolating from the aforementioned it is obvios why celebreties have become this important to some people mostly youngsters these days.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 141, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the people') or simply say ''most people''.
Suggestion: most of the people; most people
... what there friends like or follow what most of people follow in their age and celebrreties ha...
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Line 3, column 322, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...s have this tendency not discretionary, i mean imagine a highschool girl who want...
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Line 3, column 455, Rule ID: ANY_BODY[2]
Message: Did you mean 'something'?
Suggestion: something
...tion with others she must at least have some thing in common and that thing might be an in...
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Line 3, column 550, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Extrapolating
...t they can share about a famous poeple. extrapolating from the aforementioned it is obvios wh...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, look, so, thus, at least, i mean, by and large, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1935.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 412.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.69660194175 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50530610838 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62459684097 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.480582524272 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 612.0 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 72.388302415 48.9658058833 148% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.214285714 100.406767564 138% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.4285714286 20.6045352989 143% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.45110844103 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.53405017921 66% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.105025676022 0.236089414692 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0429289946552 0.076458572812 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0272421895793 0.0737576698707 37% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0742212576326 0.150856017488 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0102433015297 0.0645574589148 16% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 11.7677419355 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.5 58.1214874552 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.57 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.83 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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