Tpo 46. The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.
In every society, celebrities have an important role in people's lives becaue they are like hero for most of the people. In my opinion, nowadays young people do not pay attention to celebrities and famous people's view more than old people. Here you can see my reasons.
First, todays, young people are completely busy and do not have enough time. Todays, by emerging economic crisis around the world, finding an appropriate job becomes one of the difficulties in young people's lives. So, they have to spend their time either for learning vital and useful skills or broaden their knowledge. Hence, the young people's time is really valuable because they can by utilizing their time in a beneficial way, improve their chance for getting a job.
Second, altering the young people's view about the famous people is another noticeable reason.Todays, world change swifely and people face with a huge advancement and improvement in different field of science and technology such as the internet, nanotechnology, and the others. So, young people are aware from all aspects of the famous people. They know that the celebrities do a lot of adverse appropriate activities. This awareness help youth to think more about their idol in thier lives. And we see how now they prefer act like prosperous people who are successful in their education or in some vital jobs such as doctors, engineers.
On the other hand, some people think that celebrities are the young people's idol. Chielfy, most of the youth wear, make up, and speak like famous people. In fact, young people pay attention more to the fashion than old people, and because the celbrities are pioneer in fashion, youth completely act like them. However, I still declare that young people do not pay attention to the prominet people’s view. Actually, all of the market in the world for earning more money, try to produce clothes according celebrities idea. So, it is apparent that young people wear like them. Also, when they grow and enter to the society like universities, they prefer to act like their professor instead of the famous people.
According to my passage, now young people do not care and let that the celebrites’ opinion have an effects in their lives. Their
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 410, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a beneficial way" with adverb for "beneficial"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...ecause they can by utilizing their time in a beneficial way, improve their chance for getting a job...
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Line 3, column 93, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Todays
...ous people is another noticeable reason.Todays, world change swifely and people face w...
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Line 4, column 69, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'peoples'' or 'people's'?
Suggestion: peoples'; people's
...le think that celebrities are the young peoples idol. Chielfy, most of the youth wear, ...
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Line 4, column 420, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
... prominet people's view. Actually, all of the market in the world for earning more mo...
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Line 4, column 508, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'celebrities'' or 'celebrity's'?
Suggestion: celebrities'; celebrity's
...money, try to produce clothes according celebrities idea. So, it is apparent that young peo...
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Line 5, column 102, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'an effect' or simply 'effects'?
Suggestion: an effect; effects
... that the celebrites' opinion have an effects in their lives. Their
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Line 5, column 133, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...on have an effects in their lives. Their
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, first, hence, however, if, really, second, so, still, in fact, such as, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1861.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 373.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98927613941 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39467950092 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61234157431 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.498659517426 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 576.9 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.3 48.9658058833 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.05 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.65 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.45110844103 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.235224598268 0.236089414692 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0832350678401 0.076458572812 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0582981409028 0.0737576698707 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.150124532985 0.150856017488 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.075375854623 0.0645574589148 117% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.7 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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