TPO-47
We all live in a village and technology advancement made this happen. We can not close our eyes and live seperately without considering the society and world events in our life. I beleive that we need to know about events happening around the world to be aware of their effect on our life and be grateful for what we have.
To begin with, knowledge is power and lots of events influence our life. In other words, we are all related and we are like a united family. Any change in any part of the world and environment influences the other parts of the world. For instance, in pandemic we see that how we all are connected to spread the disease and any action in anywhere is counted. Knowing about the economy, wars, disease, environment and the fashion, whatsoever make the people united. they can find something to discuss and learn from others' mistake. Therefore, knowing about events happening around the world empower us about the future trend and preventive measures.
In addition, we usually forget in our daily life to be grateful. We used to our abundance easily and lose our interest in our daily life. We forget how fortunate we are. By accessing to the news and events all around the world we remember that how people still suffering from the things that we easily have access and feel grateful. Also, people and phylantropist can target the areas of the need in the world to improve and support accordingly. That why knowing about the events could bring hope and spread the love all around the world.
On the other hand, I believe too much bad news can affect our mental health and should be avoided. We all have ups and downs in our life and accessing to lots of bad and depressing news everyday can deteriorate our health. In fact, we need a balance to be able to manage our energy and life. We need to be healthy to be able to have impact in the world. Therefore, having balance in our life in everything specially accessing bad news should be limited.
In conclusion, although having information about all around the world could benefit us for our future goal and making plan, too much bad news can affect our well being and mental health. Balance is the best approach. Not only it empower us with knowledge, it provide some clue and target for our future plans.
- TPO44 Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports Other believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are relate 60
- TPO 45 Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement In the past young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives U 70
- TPO 52 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer 80
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement It is important to know about events happening around the world even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life 60
- Official 40 Task 1 Many scientists believe it would be possible to maintain a permanent human presence on Mars or the Moon On the other hand conditions on Venus are so extreme and inhospitable that maintaining a human presence there would be impossible 73
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 464, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: They
...ion, whatsoever make the people united. they can find something to discuss and learn...
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Line 4, column 186, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...sing to lots of bad and depressing news everyday can deteriorate our health. In fact, we...
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Line 5, column 229, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'empowers'?
Suggestion: empowers
...lance is the best approach. Not only it empower us with knowledge, it provide some clue...
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Line 5, column 259, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'provides'?
Suggestion: provides
...t only it empower us with knowledge, it provide some clue and target for our future pla...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, if, so, still, therefore, well, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, in other words, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 13.8261648746 181% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1875.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 407.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.60687960688 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49157444576 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.39402078829 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.44226044226 0.524837075471 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 600.3 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.7913599459 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 78.125 100.406767564 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.9583333333 20.6045352989 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.25 5.45110844103 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.8 11.7677419355 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.16 10.9000537634 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.34 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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