Nowadays, it is commonly accepted that all of people should try to have information about important events that occured around the world. Contrary, to this popular beliefs there are still those who argue that most of the people are really busy with thier personal works and it is unnecessary and incredible that they create more sterss and concern for themselves by some events that cannot affected their daily life. I, to a great extent agree with this idea that it is important to know about events happening around the world.
First and foremost, it is impossible that important happens in another country do not affected our life. For example, a natural erouption in the one country can have significant impact on the price of oil. At the frist view, this two things could not have any association togeter but through a exact view, we see that this country is a very important oil trader in the world and because of this desoster affected all portion of this country selling the oil decrease by this counjtry and it led to an increase on the oil cost.
On another significant fact that should be taken into the consideration is that all of us should be responsible about unfortunate happens and problems that occured for another people in the world. For example, two years age an very strong eathrquate happen in the Nepal and led to killing a lot of people. The goverment of this country is not very powrful to can support all of needs for treat and restablish of desorts. Therefore, the poeple in this country were need help from other countries. And I remember that a lot of people in my country aculecting foods and maoney for sending to the Nepal.
Finally yet importantly, maybe we think inimportant that what political altrnation occured around the world. But I clear its imcat by using one sensible example, about five years age one terorism group erected in the Serya. They killed usual people in the cities in this country. But today they are threaten ppeople in all of countries, even very distans countries. Surely, if we were more sensitive about happens that were occured in the Serya several years ago this problem could not grow in this shape.
On the basis of rerasons that mentioned above, I am convinced that we should be try to uptodated themselves from events happens in the world because of our etic ressponsibility and infoluence of this happence on our life.
- Governments should spend more money in support of arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. 90
- TPO 45- In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives 73
- To improve the quality of education, universities should spend more money on salaries for university professors. 61
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 85
- TPO 20 76
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ave any association togeter but through a exact view, we see that this country is...
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Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...n the world. For example, two years age an very strong eathrquate happen in the Ne...
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Line 5, column 460, Rule ID: WERE_VBB[1]
Message: Did you mean 'where' or 'we'?
Suggestion: where; we
.... Therefore, the poeple in this country were need help from other countries. And I r...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Finally,
...and maoney for sending to the Nepal. Finally yet importantly, maybe we think inimpor...
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Line 7, column 300, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'threatened'.
Suggestion: threatened
...ies in this country. But today they are threaten ppeople in all of countries, even very ...
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Message: Did you mean 'tried'?
Suggestion: tried
...above, I am convinced that we should be try to uptodated themselves from events hap...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... because of our etic ressponsibility and infoluence of this happence on our life....
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, if, may, really, so, still, therefore, for example, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1987.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 414.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.79951690821 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51076378781 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52253605969 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.485507246377 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 620.1 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 70.3173724763 48.9658058833 144% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.882352941 100.406767564 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.3529411765 20.6045352989 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.29411764706 5.45110844103 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.183860649545 0.236089414692 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0697007419013 0.076458572812 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0812616266536 0.0737576698707 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114354750366 0.150856017488 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0861510408501 0.0645574589148 133% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 11.7677419355 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.86 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.07 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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