TPO 48 Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Because modern life is very complex it is essential for young people to have the ability to plan and organize

In my opinion, I disagree that it is essential for young people being able to plan and organize in the modern and complex life. I feel this way for three reasons, which I will explore in the following paragraphs.

First, young people are lack of experience of life and need more time to become the person whose responsities are planning and organizing. If we let young people plan and organize, it will be very possible that all things go wrong and make them disaster. My personal experience is a compelling example. When I was a elementary school student and I was selected to be the leader of class. I was so young and lack of experience that I could not hold the affairs happening in the classroom. Therefore, all the events went wrong in that semester.

Secondly, the time of young people is not infinite, so they need to select the most efficient and effective way to learn knowledges. I think that the greatest way for them is to absorb wise of older people. Older people usually have more experience than young people, and their abilities of planning and organizing are often better than young people. By looking at and exercising the plans made by the elders, young people will learn a lot of wise and appreciate older people.

Thirdly, older people do not also have infinite time. Older people need to convey and transfer their ideas and knowledges to next generation in an contrained time, as a result they need a efficient and effective ways to accomplish it. With the favor of planning and organizing, older people can readily let young people learn all the knowledges that older people hold.

In conclusion, I think that young people should spend more time on absorbing new concepts and facts and following the plan, which is set by the older people. The most important responsbility of young people is using their all energy to absorb knowledges from the elder, since a return of this way is higher than amy other way.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, look, second, secondly, so, therefore, third, thirdly, i feel, i think, in conclusion, as a result, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 52.1666666667 69% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1606.0 1977.66487455 81% => OK
No of words: 339.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.73746312684 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29091512845 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55354336273 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 212.727598566 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.483775811209 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 494.1 618.680645161 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.8454627236 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.4705882353 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9411764706 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.64705882353 5.45110844103 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.245569489458 0.236089414692 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0872640551257 0.076458572812 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0882999763874 0.0737576698707 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.157704907862 0.150856017488 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0769314082972 0.0645574589148 119% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.21 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.65 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200

Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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