TPO-49 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?The ability to maintain friendships with a small number of people over a long period of time is more important for happiness than the ability to make many new friends

There is no shortage of debate about the importance of old friends and new friends. For a human being, Friendship is most valuable bond with others which make them a complete man. Friendship is a priceless gift, which we develop outside of the family. Sometimes friends are more closer than a family member. Therefore, it is important to maintain a friendship with small numbers of people for a longer time rather than making new friends. I feel this way because of the two reasons, which I will explain in the following essay.
First of all, the friendship is a special kind of relationship outside of the family, which depend on trust and affection. It plays a great role in our lives, whenever we are any kind of trouble or in a problem, at that time friends always help us. Sometimes friends are more valuable than a family member. Friendship needs time, and over the time the friendship bond s more stronger, and it helped and shaped our lives. My own experience is a compelling example. For example, when I was kid, my friendship is started with James and now we have a 25-year-old friendship. We have a very strong friendship. He helped me a lot and last year, he saved my life by donating his kidney. Therefore, I strongly believe that it is better to have small numbers of friends for a longer time.
Secondly, In our daily life, we are busy with work and sometimes are trapped in some big problem, at that time we need some suggestion from someone. At this situation, only a old friend can help us, because he is the only one how know you better than any other new friends. For instance, last year, I had problems with my marriage life, and I was depressed because of it. Then, my friend help me a lot, he suggested me, what I suppose to do in that situation.
In conclusion, I strongly in favour of having small numbers of old friends for the longest time. These friends are more than a family member and they will always support you in any situation.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 275, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'closer' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: closer
...de of the family. Sometimes friends are more closer than a family member. Therefore, it is ...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... I will explain in the following essay. First of all, the friendship is a specia...
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Line 2, column 371, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'stronger' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: stronger
...and over the time the friendship bond s more stronger, and it helped and shaped our lives. My...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...l numbers of friends for a longer time. Secondly, In our daily life, we are busy...
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...n from someone. At this situation, only a old friend can help us, because he is t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, for example, for instance, i feel, i suppose, in conclusion, kind of, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1612.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 356.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.52808988764 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34372677135 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5687123321 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 212.727598566 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.491573033708 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 495.9 618.680645161 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.1078999804 48.9658058833 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 76.7619047619 100.406767564 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.9523809524 20.6045352989 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.28571428571 5.45110844103 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.275620875651 0.236089414692 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0893478458039 0.076458572812 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0799347687181 0.0737576698707 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.18770625341 0.150856017488 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0661677122199 0.0645574589148 102% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.4 11.7677419355 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.7 10.9000537634 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.91 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 86.8835125448 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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