TPO-49 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?The ability to maintain friendships with a small number of people over a long period of time is more important for happiness than the ability to make many new friends

The reading and the Listening passage are both about how Humpback whales migrate for mating and food purposes using the stars. The reading and professor in the listening contradict each. The writer introduces three main reasons to explain the how the humpback whales use the stars to help them in the long migration way.

Fristy, The reading passage states that the humpback whales have complex brain structures which help then using the stars in their journey. On the other hand, the professor in the listening part totally refutes this postulate. He says that there is no real connection between the migration of the humpback whales using the stars and their complex brain structure. It seems fascinating but not convincing. he elaborates his opinion by mentioning the example of the birds migrate also without using the starts because of their brain structure. He mentions the example of the ducks which migrate using the star not because of their intelligence or their brain cognitive structure but because of the natural instinct.
their brain ability.

Secondly, the Reading passage states that the humpback whales use the stars in the migration and the is the only way that helps the whale especially during the night and the dark time. The writer also elaborates more on that points out the birds use the earth as a landmark in their migration. But the oceans are open wide and there are no landmarks can rely on, only the stars. However, the professor on the listening defeats this point. He says that the whales migrate in a straight line, not because the use of the stars but because of they have a biomagnetic structure in their brain. This biomagnetic, send external magnetic forces which help them to aware of the surroundings.

Thirdly, The postulate of using the hopping behavior to help the whales to migrate using the stars to navigate, and moreover keeping their heads up for some time. The tutor in the listening part contradicts this point. He states that the hopping to for other animals happen also during the daytime not only in the night. He elaborates his postulate by giving the example of the sharks. They are hopping and spying not to use the stars but sharks use hopping for hunting

To sum up, both reading and listening are both about the use of starts in the migration of the humpback whales, and both of them contradict each other.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 188, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...essor in the listening contradict each. The writer introduces three main reasons to...
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Line 1, column 240, Rule ID: THE_HOW[1]
Message: Did you mean 'how'?
Suggestion: how
...ntroduces three main reasons to explain the how the humpback whales use the stars to he...
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Line 3, column 8, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...em in the long migration way. Fristy, The reading passage states that the hump...
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Line 3, column 407, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: He
...t seems fascinating but not convincing. he elaborates his opinion by mentioning th...
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Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Their
...e but because of the natural instinct. their brain ability. Secondly, the Reading...
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Line 6, column 529, Rule ID: BECAUSE_OF_I[1]
Message: Probable usage error. Use 'because they' instead.
Suggestion: because they
...e, not because the use of the stars but because of they have a biomagnetic structure in their b...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, to sum up, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1977.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 404.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89356435644 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48327461151 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42265286155 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 212.727598566 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.391089108911 0.524837075471 75% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 594.0 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 10.0 3.08781362007 324% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.4435989017 48.9658058833 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.1428571429 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2380952381 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.85714285714 5.45110844103 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.53405017921 132% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0212185439416 0.236089414692 9% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.00773945305153 0.076458572812 10% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0116591985519 0.0737576698707 16% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0128985035775 0.150856017488 9% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0141433174044 0.0645574589148 22% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.28 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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