Freindship is one of the important part of our life. Without having good friends around people suffer from loneliness and are despondent. While some belive it is good to have the ability to make new friends everywhere ,others think differently. They prefer to maintain their old friends to feel happy. In my opinion, maintaining the old friends is more important due to their reliability and underestanding.
To begin with, old freinds have history to gether. They know each other for a long time and are familiar to their characteristic and personality. There is no need to say something ,they can underestand our feeling without talking. We can confide in very easy for them and feel free. Their advice is more realistic and more practical.For example, when I am sad or upset, my old friend feel that even from distance .They completely are familiar with my feeling and knew how to help me at that time. But new friends do not know us thoroughly and maybe their reaction make the situation worse. Therefore, old friends are better adviser and supporter.
Also, during time we can trust people. At first, we are not sure who is reliable and honest and who is not. Time is the best examiner. In fact, old friends are more reliable and they showed this during time.For instance, we never rely on our new friends who did not show their honesty during the difficult situation. But most of our old friends were examined during time and it is important to keep them. In fact, they are like a precios gem that we have to take care of them and maintain our relationship. My best friend is far from me but I can rely on her from distance and get help. On the other hand, making new friends could be helpful to adapt to new places and be more comfortable .However misunderestanding and dishonesty have to be in mind in every situation.
In conclusion, eventhough making new friends everywhere helps us to get along better with the environment and have fun,keeping old friendship is much more important. Not only old friends are more reliable, but also are more familiar with our behavior and more helpful.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, so, therefore, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, in my opinion, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 13.8261648746 174% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1734.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 366.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.73770491803 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37391431897 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70375865201 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 540.0 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 48.7308343339 48.9658058833 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 78.8181818182 100.406767564 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.6363636364 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.09090909091 5.45110844103 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.217924850287 0.236089414692 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.06876280653 0.076458572812 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0431114425023 0.0737576698707 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153533559466 0.150856017488 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.025365430738 0.0645574589148 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 11.7677419355 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.92 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.23 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 86.8835125448 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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