The article disscuses about the suralose which is an artificial sweetener and its danger for the body. In the lecture, the professor makes a series of points that cast doubts on all the arguments presented in the reading passage. He states many studies showed that sucrolose is perfectly useful for the people and is also safe.
First of all, he states that effecting in mouse thymus which is pointed in the article is dependent to the dose. He clarifies that no effect was seen on the rat unless they used a lot of amount of them. For having effect on thymus people have to use 4000 packed per day per month which is not possible and reasonable and nobody use them this much.
Also, the lecturer refutes the effect of sucrolose on fat tissue. In contrast of the idea presented in the reading, clorine in sucrolose has different characteristic to other forms which are toxic for the body. In fact, sucrolose do not absorb by digestive system and hence do not accumluate in the body. So,There is no build up in fat tissue and harm for the body.
Lastly, the professor states for other artificial sweetener using them may crave people to use more sweets and cakes but sucrolose do not break down when heated. Therefore, people can use it in cakes and sweets and be still in their diet and be on track and lose weight. In contrary,use of other sweetener may encourage people to eat sweet more which has lots of sugur and make them obese. Other sweetener will breakdown when are heated and do not have this capability.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 179, Rule ID: A_LOT_OF_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun amount seems to be countable; consider using: 'a lot of amounts'.
Suggestion: a lot of amounts
...ct was seen on the rat unless they used a lot of amount of them. For having effect on thymus pe...
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Line 2, column 329, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'nobody' must be used with a third-person verb: 'uses'.
Suggestion: uses
... not possible and reasonable and nobody use them this much. Also, the lecturer ref...
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Line 3, column 69, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[2]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: contrast,
...e effect of sucrolose on fat tissue. In contrast of the idea presented in the reading, c...
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Line 3, column 307, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , There
... hence do not accumluate in the body. So,There is no build up in fat tissue and harm f...
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Line 4, column 282, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , use
...be on track and lose weight. In contrary,use of other sweetener may encourage people...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, lastly, may, so, still, therefore, in contrast, in fact, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 10.4613686534 115% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 5.04856512141 79% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 7.30242825607 192% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 12.0772626932 91% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 22.412803532 76% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 30.3222958057 115% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 5.01324503311 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1247.0 1373.03311258 91% => OK
No of words: 271.0 270.72406181 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.60147601476 5.08290768461 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05734859645 4.04702891845 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.40083340423 2.5805825403 93% => OK
Unique words: 142.0 145.348785872 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.523985239852 0.540411800872 97% => OK
syllable_count: 399.6 419.366225166 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.23620309051 49% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 13.0662251656 107% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 21.2450331126 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 28.7402157264 49.2860985944 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 89.0714285714 110.228320801 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3571428571 21.698381199 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 7.06452816374 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 4.19205298013 119% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.27373068433 140% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.00935070344807 0.272083759551 3% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.00360008992627 0.0996497079465 4% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0129803088255 0.0662205650399 20% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.00483053928722 0.162205337803 3% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00836673947343 0.0443174109184 19% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 13.3589403974 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 53.8541721854 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.0289183223 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.4 12.2367328918 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.61 8.42419426049 90% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 63.6247240618 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.7273730684 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.498013245 91% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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