Freindship is one of the indispensable part of our social life. We need to communicate with others and make friends. While some believe maintaining few old friends are more important for having a happy life, others against it. In my opinion, although keeping old friends is very important because every old friend is like a precious gem that enrich our life ,we need to make new friends to be happy in our life. My reasons go as follows.
First of all, our life is changing everyday and we change our job or place that we live due to different reason. Therefore, we need to make new friends to be happy in new places.For instance, we move to another city and most of my old friends are living somewhere else. If I can not make new friends ,I would be alone and do not feel happiness. It is hard to adapt with new friends and get along with them but it is the only way that we can put up with new environment and feel comfortable and making bonds.
Also, different friends have different point of views, thus, they broaden our view and make us open-minded. In other words, it is pleasant to see things differently and from different scopes. This could be possible by making new friends with different idea. For instance, when I went to college and lived in dormitory, I made new friends there from different culture.It was interesting how we can change our view to improve ourselves and not be judgmental. Threfore, making new friends helps us to be more experienced and be more optimistic.
Lastly, we live in the world of communication and social skills is very important for our satisfaction. Research study from Harvard university showed that people with greater and broader social connection live longer and healthier. In addition, depression is product of loneliness and isolation. Thus, we need making friends during our life to feel happy and not feel as being outsider.
In conclusion, although maintaining our old friends is very important because they are more reliable and more familiar with us, making new friends has more advantage for live happily. Not only they grow our perspective and broaden our view, but also make our social life more prosperous. We can live much happier if we surround ourselves with different friends.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...like a precious gem that enrich our life ,we need to make new friends to be happy ...
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Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...ws. First of all, our life is changing everyday and we change our job or place that we ...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: For
...e new friends to be happy in new places.For instance, we move to another city and m...
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...here else. If I can not make new friends ,I would be alone and do not feel happine...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: It
...ew friends there from different culture.It was interesting how we can change our v...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, lastly, so, therefore, thus, while, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, first of all, in my opinion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1855.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 387.0 407.700716846 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.79328165375 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43534841618 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66666165895 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.478036175711 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 568.8 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.3500924029 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.3333333333 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4285714286 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.80952380952 5.45110844103 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.204811118209 0.236089414692 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.078769967168 0.076458572812 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0643307502828 0.0737576698707 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142417811385 0.150856017488 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0296643171594 0.0645574589148 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.5 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.1 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 86.8835125448 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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