History is considered one of the most important aspects in our lives. History can provide us with a good vision about old cultures. I am sure that many people would agree that it is a great idea that university students should study history no matter what their major is, while others would disagree. However, when it comes to me I totally agree that all students should take history classes. I feel this way for two important reasons, which I will demonstrate in the following essay.
To begin with, history helps students to gain new knowledge. Nowadays, students are living in different community and they have to be aware about the old people from last decades. For example, my son in medical school and his main subjects are chemistry, biology, math, and physics. However, the university made the history class is obligatory for all students in order to give them clues about the herbs. Moreover, my son told me that during that session he learned about how Chinese people used herbs to treat very chronic diseses like hyper tension and cancer. In addition, he gain experience about the Egyptian people and their mystery to keep their died bodies for thousand of years. Furthermore, he knew a lot of new ideas and thoughts about people from different counties and how these people live and interact to each other. On the other hand, my cousin graduated from medical school in Italy, but he did not take history classes at all. So, he could not has any knowledge like my son. As you can see, many students can benefit from these different lessons and they can expand their horizons.
In addition, history lectures can help many students to relieve their stress. Many students are so busy with many exams, assignments and tremendous of paper work. Also, they are so worry about their grades and about their graduation projects. In fact, studying something like history can take students a way little bite from that stress. For instance, this month, my brother is working on his internship at art production company and he is studying at the last year at university. He is always stressed because he has to finish all his paper work on time and he has to be graduated with a high score. Nevertheless, my brother told me that when he start his internship in that book store, he would be able to forget about his frustration and he feel energized. In addition, he has a good schedule . So, he can go to that company two times per week and spend the rest of the week between classes and exams. As a result, he got a good grade at the first smister. This experience taught me that working on history activities can help students to get rid from their stress.
In sum, I definitely agree that students should study history classes no matter what their majors are. This is because history can help them to gain new experience, and because history provide students with a good chance to relieve their stress.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 581, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'gains'.
Suggestion: gains
...per tension and cancer. In addition, he gain experience about the Egyptian people an...
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Line 3, column 671, Rule ID: NODT_DOZEN[1]
Message: Use simply: 'a thousand'.
Suggestion: a thousand
...r mystery to keep their died bodies for thousand of years. Furthermore, he knew a lot of...
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Line 3, column 964, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: 'have'
Suggestion: have
...istory classes at all. So, he could not has any knowledge like my son. As you can s...
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Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ns and they can expand their horizons. In addition, history lectures can help m...
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Line 5, column 648, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'starts'.
Suggestion: starts
...heless, my brother told me that when he start his internship in that book store, he w...
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Line 5, column 745, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'feels'.
Suggestion: feels
... to forget about his frustration and he feel energized. In addition, he has a good s...
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Line 5, column 796, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...zed. In addition, he has a good schedule . So, he can go to that company two times...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, moreover, nevertheless, so, while, as to, for example, for instance, i feel, in addition, in fact, as a result, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 73.0 43.0788530466 169% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2404.0 1977.66487455 122% => OK
No of words: 508.0 407.700716846 125% => OK
Chars per words: 4.73228346457 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74751043592 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42247572757 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 240.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.472440944882 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 739.8 618.680645161 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 20.0 9.59856630824 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.2556974257 48.9658058833 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.8571428571 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1428571429 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.71428571429 5.45110844103 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 11.7677419355 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.86 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.14 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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