TPO 51
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
I think that movies and TV programs could have more negative effects on adolescents behaviors. Since they are passing sensitive emotional period, many movies, especially the movies that contain violent contents, could have negative effects on young people. In a addition, the young people have less information and experiences about their social relationships, So they could vulnerable to some TV programs which contain
First of all, it is so clear that young people in a sensitive age and many movies could be harmful to their spirits. Violence is the frequent subject of many TV shows. Nowadays, almost all people have access to a wide range of films and movies. Many of the movies contain violent scenes in order to make the films more attractive and exciting. However, many times the harmful effects of the violent scenes have been overlooked by directors and producers. In fact, young people will be affected by the exaggerated action in films. They may learn violent behaviors because they consider them as models. For example, when the series of "Prison Break" was being played in my country, it clearly affected many adolescents in our surroundings, in my friends and their families. They reported their young persons in their family got easily angry, lose their patience easily and behave in a violent manner in general. So, we should admit that the movies are highly efficatious in our young behaviors tendencies.
Second, young people are less engaged in a real life and have fewer experiences in their social relationships. In addition to violence, many movies contain the relationships between opposite genders. For example, a young boy falls in love with a young girl just because of her beauty, or a girl falls in love with a boy just because of his wealth. They set some specific standards for good relationships and pay less attention to difficulties and realities in life. These kinds of movies are common in our country. As a result, these kinds of movies could shape the personality of young people. In real life, they seek a relationship just identical to the standards they learned in movies. For example, they want their partner to be so pretty or to make up her face extremely, or they expect that their partner provides them with whatever she or he wants, or they believe that they essentially should go to only fancy and luxury restaurants. All of these ways of thinking are results of the movies that affect the behavior of adolescents.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 261, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ve negative effects on young people. In a addition, the young people have less in...
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Line 2, column 889, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a violent manner" with adverb for "violent"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
..., lose their patience easily and behave in a violent manner in general. So, we should admit that th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, look, may, second, so, for example, i think, in addition, in fact, in general, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2064.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 413.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.99757869249 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50803742585 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71527803138 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.479418886199 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 631.8 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.365530473 48.9658058833 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.2857142857 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6666666667 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.90476190476 5.45110844103 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.53405017921 66% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.158712828394 0.236089414692 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.056450537721 0.076458572812 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0492705530844 0.0737576698707 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128417207232 0.150856017488 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0426480320488 0.0645574589148 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.72 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.13 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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