TPO 54 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state sponsored Olympic teams Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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TPO 54 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state sponsored Olympic teams Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer

Regarding the living in modern area that provides people to have a hectic daily lifestyle, government should provide better environment to release the stress s and highly tension of the peoples. In other words, by providing the healthy environment the politician can help humans to make happier life. Despite the fact that the effects of inventing artistic environment cannot be neglected to make people happier, it is my firm conviction that investing on athletic points are more prominent to create people healthier. In what follows, I will elaborate on my perspective.
The first vital point to bear in mind is that proliferation of exercise and encouraging people through doing different sport will make them a well-time to change their lifestyles and care more about their health. In fact, due to daily hectic lifestyle that people are involving with, there is no enough time to have an exercise. However, If the government spend money to invent new opportunity and impulsive people to engage more with sport, they will become healthy. Take my personal experience as a compelling example. I was working in a big company for a significant amounts of hours that makes me lots of physical problems. by pathing through that hectic days our company had decided to bring about a gym for employee which was significantly effect on our efficiency directly. This example clearly illustrates that, If the administrative of our company hadn't been brought the sport environment for the employee, the efficiency of worker would have been reduce over the passing time.
Another important reason that would distinct the effectiveness of spending money on athletics emerge on children’s future. As the children need to grow in an exciting society which is help them to become more calm and mitigate the paucity of tension on their daily days, it will suppose government to fund strenthly the workout worlds by taking and spending more money on them. Although, arts have especial benefits on children’s future's life, athletic known as indispensable for every kind of kids. The resect study about the effectiveness of exercise on children rather than art represents that students who spend most of their time with sport make their future secure by making their sprite calm and activate their mind by evolving with daily workout.
In conclusion, I totally agree that the government better to spend more money on exercise rather than art. It not only does release people’s stress, but also help children’s to make their future lifestyle more secure.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 264, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...e to daily hectic lifestyle that people are involving with, there is no enough time to have a...
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Line 2, column 570, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'amount'?
Suggestion: amount
...king in a big company for a significant amounts of hours that makes me lots of physical...
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Line 2, column 628, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: By
...hat makes me lots of physical problems. by pathing through that hectic days our co...
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Line 2, column 857, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: hadn't
...t, If the administrative of our company hadnt been brought the sport environment for ...
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Line 2, column 957, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'reduced'.
Suggestion: reduced
...he efficiency of worker would have been reduce over the passing time. Another importa...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, regarding, so, well, in conclusion, in fact, kind of, in other words

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2135.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 413.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16949152542 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50803742585 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75412633148 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.549636803874 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 663.3 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.386968174 48.9658058833 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.588235294 100.406767564 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.2941176471 20.6045352989 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.82352941176 5.45110844103 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.127709726791 0.236089414692 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0460069340973 0.076458572812 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0538126257398 0.0737576698707 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0909586554928 0.150856017488 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0441578196812 0.0645574589148 68% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 11.7677419355 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.54 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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