TPO-54 - Independent Writing Task
In my view, governments should spend money in both of them. arts are important parts of our lives. we learn many things from them. However, athletics have advantage of interesting and having healthy body and mind.
Everyone knows the sports, and do it at least once in his life. sports are more familier for people and they enjoy from doing or even watching it. so, it is more important for most citizen to watching sports or doing it than going to a theater. A primary example from own exeprience on this point is when I was studets, I had some firends working in theater. they always had problem with make money form their theater, and there always was empty seat in theater salon. On the other hand, I remember my university that was very crowded, when the universities administrator decided to play a national footbal play at the university. that time I undrestand sports and such this kind activity is how much important for others.
These days, people rarely have time to do body activity. they have to work all day long. If this conditions continues, the society will have healthy problem. so the government should spend more money on this aspect of athletics too. it is important to prevent such this problem. With doing excersice we will have more body and mental health. after doing some simple activity, we can concentrate to our works. According to the study that conductet with most reputable university in my country, doing 3 hours excersice after waking up is necessary for health. even though the art shape our thoughts, but as I said Athelicts shape our body, and seqeunce our mind.
art is valuable, but not enough to interest most people, or garantue their health. With suppoting athelics activities we will have more pleasant society.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 61, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Arts
...nts should spend money in both of them. arts are important parts of our lives. we le...
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Line 1, column 100, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: We
... arts are important parts of our lives. we learn many things from them. However, a...
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Line 2, column 64, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Sports
...s, and do it at least once in his life. sports are more familier for people and they e...
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Line 2, column 359, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: They
... I had some firends working in theater. they always had problem with make money form...
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Line 2, column 399, Rule ID: FROM_FORM[4]
Message: Did you mean 'from'?
Suggestion: from
...they always had problem with make money form their theater, and there always was emp...
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Line 2, column 545, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'universities'' or 'university's'?
Suggestion: universities'; university's
...versity that was very crowded, when the universities administrator decided to play a nationa...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: That
...ational footbal play at the university. that time I undrestand sports and such this ...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: They
...e rarely have time to do body activity. they have to work all day long. If this cond...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: So
... the society will have healthy problem. so the government should spend more money ...
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Line 3, column 233, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
... money on this aspect of athletics too. it is important to prevent such this probl...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: After
... will have more body and mental health. after doing some simple activity, we can conc...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Even
...fter waking up is necessary for health. even though the art shape our thoughts, but ...
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Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Art
...shape our body, and seqeunce our mind. art is valuable, but not enough to interest...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, so, at least, in my view, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 52.1666666667 65% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1458.0 1977.66487455 74% => OK
No of words: 302.0 407.700716846 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.82781456954 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1687104957 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49640766419 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 212.727598566 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.566225165563 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 446.4 618.680645161 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.1344086022 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.9442303606 48.9658058833 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 66.2727272727 100.406767564 66% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.7272727273 20.6045352989 67% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.77272727273 5.45110844103 51% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.5376344086 235% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.88709677419 246% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.2 11.7677419355 70% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.74 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.14 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.31 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 86.8835125448 67% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.0537634409 72% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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