People often hold different views on whether the government should spend more money in support of the arts than sports. Based on personal experience of my life, I contend that the government should support athletics since the government cares about its reputation, the citizen's health and employment rate.
First of all, reputation is always what the government pursuing and spending more money on sports can make it easier for athletics to win gold medals in global competitions. For example, the Taiwan government supports training equipment and provides stipends for athletes, so our national athletes can spend all of their time preparing for the competition. As a consequence, our athletes are well prepared and can win gold medals in Olympics games easily. The more medals we won in the Olympics games the more citizens will think our government is really good. On the other hand, if the government subsidizes arts more, people will want to see some special achievement. While there is no global competition for art, so people might think the government is wasting money, which is detrimental to the government's reputation.
Secondly, it is important for the citizen to get healthy, and spending more money on sports will make people healthy. Take Zui-In Dai, the world's top badminton player and the idol for example. People play badminton instead of playing video games at home. People exercise more in order to get stronger and healthier like their role models. On the contrary, if people view the painter as their idol, they might spend all day sitting on the chair to hone their painting skills without getting up and doing exericse. The more people sit still without moving, the more likely they will get some waist diseases and cardiovascular diseases.
Last but not least, decreasing the unemployment rate is always the government's goal, and spending more on sports can make the industry more suitable for people to work in. In order to support an athlete, there should be a professional nutritionist to design healthy recipes, a well-trained therapist to soothe athlete's body pain, and an experienced coach to teach the skills. Meanwhile, broadcasting sports can can also provide job vacancy for TV anchor and critics.That is to say, there are more job chances for people to work when government decide to spend more their budget on sporting.
In conclusion, I disagree that the government should spend more money in supporting arts. The government cares about reputation, people's health and employment rate, and spend more money in sports can earn more prestigious medals, make people willing to train their body, and provide more job vacancy.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 270, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'citizens'' or 'citizen's'?
Suggestion: citizens'; citizen's
...ernment cares about its reputation, the citizens health and employment rate. First of...
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Line 3, column 800, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'governments'' or 'government's'?
Suggestion: governments'; government's
...ting money, which is detrimental to the governments reputation. Secondly, it is importan...
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Line 7, column 68, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'governments'' or 'government's'?
Suggestion: governments'; government's
...ing the unemployment rate is always the governments goal, and spending more on sports can m...
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Line 7, column 408, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: can
... skills. Meanwhile, broadcasting sports can can also provide job vacancy for TV anchor ...
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Line 7, column 467, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: That
...e job vacancy for TV anchor and critics.That is to say, there are more job chances f...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... body, and provide more job vacancy.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, really, second, secondly, so, still, well, while, for example, in conclusion, first of all, on the contrary, on the other hand, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 43.0788530466 49% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 24.0 8.0752688172 297% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2242.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 433.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.17782909931 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56165014514 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70125132914 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5103926097 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 664.2 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.7315322295 48.9658058833 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.0 100.406767564 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7894736842 20.6045352989 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.63157894737 5.45110844103 158% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.06 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.16 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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