TPO 54 Writing Independent Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state sponsored Olympic teams Use specific reasons and examples to support you

In my opinion. I definitely disagree the statement that governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics. Though arts brings us calm and beauty, athletics brings a sence of vigor and passion, thus should not be neglected.

While it is true that arts is of great importance to a country, atheletics are also important for a counrty. Arts represents, in a way, the essential beauty of the world, and could change people's moods. As for me, whenver I feel stressed, I would simply listen to the music, then I would feel greatly relaxed. Arts for a country is great way of enjoyment, as well as a panacea for stress. However, atheletics represents the honor of the country. A country with great atheletes wins the respect from both the world and citizens. If a country has poor performance on atheletics, the country's people will be less confident, and the world will look down upon it. Remember that the Olympics was first created for replacing the war, the Olympics is like a war of the country, then the country should not neglect.

What's more, over-funding in arts while neglecting atheletics could harm the society. From the view of an economist, suppose the government has devoted a great amount of money in arts, the demand of artists will significantly increase. This may lead to a trend for students to study arts. However, only those who are highly talented could do well in arts. Thus, the country have great number of artists with insufficient skills. Not only the level of arts in this country will deterioriate, but these artists will also suffer from their poor quality of work. In a word, devote too much money to arts will only see the overall quality of arts decrease. In addition, neglecting atheletics could lead to public criticism. Those who want to perform sports won't have the resources. As sports is one of the main topics of people's daily conversation, in a pessimistic case, this measure will do harm to the relationships between people.

Finally, in philosophical sense, the world, including the country is subtle balance to multiple forces, often two counter forces. For example, the United States politcs is a balance of several forces. This also applies to the statement. Arts is all about calm and relaxation, by contrast, athletics is about passion and stress. Without passion and stress, the country will lose the balance. Suppose all people in the country spending all day appreciating arts, feeling for calm and relaxation. For the people themselves, they lose a important way to enjoy life-by living passionately. For the country, there is no means to develop, for everyone has no stress and thus has little motive to work.

In conclusion, arts and atheletics are a balance of calm and passion. For the government, it should devote fund arts and atheletics all the same.

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Average: 5.1 (3 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, look, may, so, then, thus, well, while, as for, for example, i feel, in addition, in conclusion, all the same, as well as, in my opinion, it is true

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 9.8082437276 194% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 43.0788530466 53% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2372.0 1977.66487455 120% => OK
No of words: 482.0 407.700716846 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92116182573 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68556276237 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70927031849 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.48755186722 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 708.3 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 9.0 3.08781362007 291% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 31.0 20.6003584229 150% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.3735830529 48.9658058833 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.5161290323 100.406767564 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.5483870968 20.6045352989 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.06451612903 5.45110844103 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.131857203913 0.236089414692 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0377979180565 0.076458572812 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0808543905029 0.0737576698707 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102828498939 0.150856017488 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.104426135923 0.0645574589148 162% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 11.7677419355 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.96 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.66 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 86.8835125448 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: What's
...then the country should not neglect. Whats more, over-funding in arts while neglec...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 532, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...n. For the people themselves, they lose a important way to enjoy life-by living p...
^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, look, may, so, then, thus, well, while, as for, for example, i feel, in addition, in conclusion, all the same, as well as, in my opinion, it is true

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 9.8082437276 194% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 43.0788530466 53% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2372.0 1977.66487455 120% => OK
No of words: 482.0 407.700716846 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92116182573 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68556276237 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70927031849 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.48755186722 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 708.3 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 9.0 3.08781362007 291% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 31.0 20.6003584229 150% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.3735830529 48.9658058833 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.5161290323 100.406767564 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.5483870968 20.6045352989 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.06451612903 5.45110844103 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.131857203913 0.236089414692 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0377979180565 0.076458572812 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0808543905029 0.0737576698707 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102828498939 0.150856017488 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.104426135923 0.0645574589148 162% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 11.7677419355 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.96 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.66 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 86.8835125448 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.