tpo 8.
Television advertising directed towards young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed.
For a long time, television, as a public medium for human beings, has entertained people with various programs, broadcasts. Without any shadow of doubt, whether or not we accept it, television, specially advertising, change the principal of human kind's contemplation. With this in mind, some believe that it stands to reason that television advertising directed toward children aged from two to five need to be banned due to its negative effect, while others hold the opposite view. As far as I am concerned, the first attitude carries more weight for several reasons, three of the most substantial are discussed below.
The most compelling point is that advertising companies often present their products in an exaggerated manner, which leads to mislead kids due to the fact that children under the age five lack the ability to understand what is good and what is bad. They believe everything they see around them; hence, they think whatever they watch on television advertising is true. For instance, I had a cousin who is four years old, one day when he watched a television advertising in which a small child managed to fly thanks to wearing a coat. He, immediately, put on his coat, and started to try that stunt on his room window. As a result, promotions have a direct effect on children owing to the fact that kids are not able to extract the gist of advertisements, they believe what they just believe what they say.
Another interpretation why I do not concur with the latter perspective in the introductory paragraph is that promotions may cause waste money and emotional torture for parents when they fail to fulfil their irrational demands of their children. Regardless of what is children's true needs, commercial companies aim to only sell their products, which are mostly useless or unsuitable for children. They use colorful and fantasy promotions so as to attract children to demand those items from their parents. If parents consider the products and find them kind of meaningless junk, they cry and insist on purchasing that things, which can make parents crazy. Consequently, commercial messages may not only be unsuitable for children, but also bother their parents.
Last but least, television advertising promulgates bad habits among children. For example, in order to promote junk food products, advertising companies often exhibit a fat child who starts eagerly devouring unhealthy food such as burger and pizza, which inclines children to unhealthy food rather than healthy one, changing their eating pattern, thus endangering their health.
To put it in a nutshell, having considered all of the aforementioned ingredients discussed above, I do endorse my point of view that the demerits of commercial messages directed toward students are more than its merits. Therefore, I think that there is an essential need to revolutionize the legs regarding advertising, and parents should keep their eyes watching what their kids seeing.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 154, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
...roadcasts. Without any shadow of doubt, whether or not we accept it, television, specially adv...
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Line 2, column 86, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in an exaggerated manner" with adverb for "exaggerated"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... companies often present their products in an exaggerated manner, which leads to mislead kids due to the...
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Line 3, column 443, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...hey use colorful and fantasy promotions so as to attract children to demand those items ...
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Line 5, column 44, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...put it in a nutshell, having considered all of the aforementioned ingredients discussed ab...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'consequently', 'first', 'hence', 'if', 'may', 'regarding', 'so', 'therefore', 'thus', 'while', 'as to', 'for example', 'for instance', 'i think', 'kind of', 'such as', 'as a result']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.236162361624 0.229887763892 103% => OK
Verbs: 0.164206642066 0.158761421928 103% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0867158671587 0.0866891130778 100% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0424354243542 0.046263068375 92% => OK
Pronouns: 0.070110701107 0.0685040099705 102% => OK
Prepositions: 0.112546125461 0.118717715034 95% => OK
Participles: 0.0332103321033 0.0351676179071 94% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.88920800438 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0369003690037 0.0309702414327 119% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => More particles wanted.
Determiners: 0.0664206642066 0.0887237588012 75% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00738007380074 0.0209618222197 35% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.029520295203 0.0139019557991 212% => Maybe 'Which' is overused. If other WH_determiners like 'Who, What, Whom, Whose...' are used too in sentences, then there are no issues.
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2968.0 2387.08602151 124% => OK
No of words: 479.0 408.028673835 117% => OK
Chars per words: 6.19624217119 5.86048508987 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67825486995 4.48200974243 104% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.377870563674 0.338922669872 111% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.294363256785 0.251872472559 117% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.206680584551 0.174417080927 118% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.152400835073 0.112833075102 135% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88920800438 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 277.0 212.727598566 130% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.578288100209 0.524397521467 110% => OK
Word variations: 72.5894426638 59.2087087015 123% => OK
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6684587814 82% => OK
Sentence length: 28.1764705882 20.5533526081 137% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.9803362143 48.84282405 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 174.588235294 120.699889404 145% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.1764705882 20.5533526081 137% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.11764705882 0.644075263715 174% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.54480286738 72% => OK
Readability: 57.6127962667 45.7405998639 126% => OK
Elegance: 1.38 1.45489161554 95% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.219117370523 0.300154397459 73% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0802419924317 0.103427244359 78% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0388668469245 0.0752933317313 52% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.515393985062 0.497263757937 104% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.13715066058 0.151897553556 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0829768922946 0.114077575197 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0677687388698 0.0781384742642 87% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.238002982916 0.336927656856 71% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0985803426414 0.067059652881 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135032427812 0.210909579961 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0453216732408 0.0618886996521 73% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8870967742 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.86379928315 129% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.91756272401 81% => OK
Positive topic words: 7.0 8.42114695341 83% => OK
Negative topic words: 5.0 2.4623655914 203% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.75985663082 72% => OK
Total topic words: 14.0 13.6433691756 103% => OK
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Rates: 86 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26 Out of 30