TPO INTEGRATED ELEPHANTS BEHAVIORS 51

The reading and the lecturer both are about the most captivating creature on Earth, elephants. The reading material brings several surprising behaviors of elephants. However, the professor in the lecture casts doubt on the beliefs mentioned in the reading and she says that they are misunderstanding by the author.

Firstly, the author states that elephants are aware of their death and when they become elder they break away from their herds and locate their bodies near water flows until they die lonely. In contrast, the lecturer rejects this point. She says that when elephants become elder their abilities for digesting harsh vegetations diminish; because their teeth do not work very well. Therefore, they go near water flows where soften vegetations exist for them to eat easily.

Secondly, the reading claims that elephants have the ability of painting objects such as animals or flowers. Nevertheless, the professor in the lecture refutes this idea. She believes that elephants have sensitive ears; then, humans train elephants by touching their ears and they paint everything they learn. Therefore, they do not have especial ability of painting independently.

Finally, the reading material believes that elephants have a fear of mice and every time they see mice they try to back away from them. Nonetheless, the lecturer challenges this belief and states that elephants back away from animals they do not familiarize with them. As a result, they avoid mice because they have never seen them before. If we observe elephants which live in zoo with a lot of mice we can recognize that they do not react to mice because they know them.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 404, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... work very well. Therefore, they go near water flows where soften vegetations exi...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, firstly, however, if, nevertheless, nonetheless, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, well, in contrast, such as, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 15.1003584229 20% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 52.1666666667 54% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 0.0 8.0752688172 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1385.0 1977.66487455 70% => OK
No of words: 268.0 407.700716846 66% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16791044776 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04607285448 4.48103885553 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54726702182 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 140.0 212.727598566 66% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.522388059701 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 421.2 618.680645161 68% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 9.0 3.08781362007 291% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.3088059119 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.3333333333 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8666666667 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.53333333333 5.45110844103 175% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.088275919986 0.236089414692 37% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0347707939911 0.076458572812 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0364469653 0.0737576698707 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.057284895702 0.150856017488 38% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0195153745698 0.0645574589148 30% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.41 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.66 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 86.8835125448 62% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

More content wanted.

Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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