TPO INTEGRATED ELEPHANTS BEHAVIORS 51
The reading proposes that elephants have some special behaviors. However, the lecture oppose that the believes mentioned in the reading are misunderstanding.
First, the reading states that when elephants are approaching to death, they stay away from their herd to die alone. But, the lecture says that when elephants getting older, they lost their teeth. They search for softer vegetation food, which usually found near the water. That is why elephants graves yard found in those places.
Second, the reading argues that elephants are able to represent objects through arts. They have the artistic ability to hold the paint brush in their trunk and use it to paint on canvas. However, the lecture, opposes this point saying that humans are training the elephants to hold the brush and draw lines. Every time elephant are doing that humans encouraging them. Holding the brush and drawing lines dose not mean they are able to draw flowers.
Third the reading states that elephants are feared from mice. When they confront with mice, elephants backed away from mice and leave the area. The professor refutes this point saying that elephants are feared from mice because they are unfamiliar to them. If mice are common to them, they will react normally to them.
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in sponsoring arts than in athletics (like state Olympics team). 84
- Some parents offer their school - age children money for each high grade they get in school. Do you think this is a good idea. 60
- tpo indpendent 20 3
- TPO INTEGRATED 22 73
- TPO-40 - Independent Writing Task Some parent offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school Do you think this is a good idea?Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 83
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 103, Rule ID: BELIEVE_BELIEF[1]
Message: Did you mean 'beliefs' (noun) instead of believes (verb)?
Suggestion: beliefs
...s. However, the lecture oppose that the believes mentioned in the reading are misunderst...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...d in the reading are misunderstanding. First, the reading states that when elep...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...herd to die alone. But, the lecture says that when elephants getting older, they ...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...tting older, they lost their teeth. They search for softer vegetation food, which...
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...ts graves yard found in those places. Second, the reading argues that elephant...
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...ot mean they are able to draw flowers. Third the reading states that elephants ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, second, so, third
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 21.0 52.1666666667 40% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1072.0 1977.66487455 54% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 211.0 407.700716846 52% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08056872038 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.81127787577 4.48103885553 85% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.24659547163 2.67179642975 84% => OK
Unique words: 115.0 212.727598566 54% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.545023696682 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 310.5 618.680645161 50% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.94265232975 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 20.8205027157 48.9658058833 43% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 71.4666666667 100.406767564 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.0666666667 20.6045352989 68% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.8 5.45110844103 51% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 11.8709677419 25% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.123708745855 0.236089414692 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0527799110008 0.076458572812 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0387342312908 0.0737576698707 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0787019231925 0.150856017488 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0120084899478 0.0645574589148 19% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 11.7677419355 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 58.1214874552 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.59 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.77 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 46.0 86.8835125448 53% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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