TPO OG1- independent
some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Others prefer to live with their families for a longer time.
Young offsprings inevitably have to live by themselves; if they are not ready for that phase of their lives, they will have experienced hard times by the time they reach their 50's. In this context, there are mutually exclusive ideas regarding whether youngsters become independent from their parents as soon as possible or stay with them for a relatively longer period is more beneficial. From my point of view, I am definitely inclined to the former notion although the latter may have more aficionados among elderly people. My answer to this debating bone of contention is twofold. In the following, the rationale behind it will be elaborated by the most outstanding, solid proofs.
The first and foremost reason which is worth mentioning is that this early independency will help young adults to start managing their assets and capitals. This competency is critical for their future lives. Moreover, they will be forced to try to find diverse ways to earn money. As an illustration, let us compare Norwegian and Iraqi teenagers. In Norway, it is customary that an offpring leaves their parents when they are 14/15 years-old. Thus, they enter their country's workforce earlier in comparison with Iraq's adolescents who generally live with their parents at least until their 30's. This beneficial notion of Norwegians has affected them positively, mainly because they earn money and learn how to save it for purposeful reasons in the future. On the other hand, young Iraqis are used to depending on their parents' salaries which has caused a drastic unemployment rate in their country. If they have left their parent early, the Iraq's government would not have faced an unemployment issue.
The second and equally far-reaching explanation to bear in mind is that the urge of becoming independent will lead youngsters to improve their self-related skills, so they will have a higher self-esteem and self-confidence comparing with others who always depend on others. To put it into a more vivid picture, scholars of RMIT, a renowned knowledge institute in Australia, have conducted a survey of their students among whom they disseminated a questionnaire. They realized that there is a direct exponential relation between their level of independency (with the key factor of not living with parents) and their self-esteem. In other words, the more they solve their problems on their own, the happier they feel in their lives. Providing that an individual try to learn necessary skills of living by experiencing independency, they can become a more benefical person in the future insomuch as not only they are satisfied with their lives, but also others can rely on them.
In conclusion, taking all the aforementioned rationalizations into account, I believe leaving parents' houses early is a satisfactory action for young adults although there are some exceptions which can be excluded from the general rule. To recapitulate my opinions, this action not only helps teenagers to learn how to make money which will lead them to understand the asset management skill earlier but also will make them happier people on whom others can rely.
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| 2020-06-02 | Seyed Armin Mirhosseini | 90 | view |
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, moreover, regarding, second, so, thus, at least, in conclusion, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 63.0 43.0788530466 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2627.0 1977.66487455 133% => OK
No of words: 508.0 407.700716846 125% => OK
Chars per words: 5.17125984252 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74751043592 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84297973789 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 271.0 212.727598566 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.533464566929 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 811.8 618.680645161 131% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.6554287193 48.9658058833 130% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.095238095 100.406767564 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1904761905 20.6045352989 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.90476190476 5.45110844103 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.340166783311 0.236089414692 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106885118849 0.076458572812 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0902034375277 0.0737576698707 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.210586033992 0.150856017488 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0700607523313 0.0645574589148 109% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 11.7677419355 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.09 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 137.0 86.8835125448 158% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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