TPO13: The extended family (grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past.
Following the era advancement, the structure of family has evolved subtly from extended family to nuclear family, the number of family members has reduced from around ten to three or four, and that kind of big families has gradually fade away from our life. From my perspective, though extended family was indeed an integral part of life in the past decades, it has been less important nowadays.
To begin with, the improvement of material living standards has a far-reaching effect on the transformation of family structure. When my father was a child in the mid and late twentieth century, he lived in a humble house together with his grandparents, parents, uncles, aunts, and cousins. Those family members had to rely on each other in an attempt to survive during that tough period. However, in these days, the situation has already changed. Owing to the booming economy, people are able to accumulate a stock of wealth. And apartments become available for general consumers, which makes it possible for people to move out of the big family.
Moreover, if advanced transportation did not emerge, people would still stay in an extended family. In the past, bicycles were predominant among transportation means, by which people could go to the workplace or markets, but they were restricted in a relatively small scale of activity areas. it was reasonable that many extended families existed during that time. On the country, today, people have many choices of transportation means including automobiles, high-speed rails, and so on. people are not limited in the previous areas any longer, and they can build their small family anywhere to some extent if financial condition permits.
Finally, philosophies of life differ from individual to individual nowadays. Potential contradiction may come out, if close relatives always stay in a house together. Also, young generation seems to be more aggressive than the old. young people are willing to pursue ideal jobs at the risk of leaving the shelter of family and to make a living on their own. Therefore, nuclear family replaces extended family gradually.
considering the economic and social factors stated above, the number of extended family is shrinking and the impact of this family on people is being weakened. Consequently, I consider that extended family is not vital to us all currently.
- TPO13: The extended family (grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past. 90
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 234, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'faded'.
Suggestion: faded
...that kind of big families has gradually fade away from our life. From my perspective...
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Line 5, column 294, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...latively small scale of activity areas. it was reasonable that many extended famil...
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Line 7, column 233, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Young
...ems to be more aggressive than the old. young people are willing to pursue ideal jobs...
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Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Considering
...replaces extended family gradually. considering the economic and social factors stated ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, finally, however, if, may, moreover, so, still, therefore, kind of, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 43.0788530466 51% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1983.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 381.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.20472440945 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41805628031 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81967711135 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.603674540682 0.524837075471 115% => OK
syllable_count: 629.1 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.1564848214 48.9658058833 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.15 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.05 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.3 5.45110844103 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.253111122958 0.236089414692 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0673636982214 0.076458572812 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0704052278635 0.0737576698707 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129902728691 0.150856017488 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0448215277847 0.0645574589148 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 11.7677419355 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 58.1214874552 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.88 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.89 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 86.8835125448 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.