TPO24-2: One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job.
The parents have been concern about children's future and have tried to guide them in the right ways. Their worries increase parallel with children's growing. They have attempted to expose them with the real life's troubles. I think one of these ways is finding part-time job for the teenage children. I am so eager to say my point of view towards this issue.
One of the primary reasons is that part-time job can enhance children's self-confidence. I believe that job help the teenagers to discover their skills and enforce them. Recognizing the talents is equal with rising self-confidence. Beside, we know that nowadays companies employ people who have more self-confidence and it is a plus profit of part-time jobs results. For instance, my parents encourage me to go part-time work when I were only 13 years old. I had been working in the building construction near the civil engineer for a 6 month. I taught like a little engineer and this sense improve my confidence and I said to myself, ''I will become a good engineer''.
There is also a more subtle point we must consider, part-time job instructs us to manage our time and money. Time and money are essential factors and play undoubtedly role in the individual, family and society economies. Teenager learn to control them and find out their value in the work. It is beneficial experiment for them before start the real and full time work.
What is more, I would say that part-time job involve the teenager with life problems and prepare them to cooperate with hard conditions. I think this is exceptional opportunity for the young people to face with problems in the work atmosphere and be familiar with them. This experiment will assist them to solve their difficulties more fast in the compare with others, which do not have any perspective about work’s problems and encounter with them for the first time.
All in all, if all the factors are completed, we can reach this conclusion that part-time job is one of the effective ways to increase teenagers’ self-confidence, moreover, teach them time and money saving skills, also, prepare them for face with actual problems in the life.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Message: This word is normally spelled as one.
Suggestion: fulltime
...ment for them before start the real and full time work. What is more, I would say that...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'first', 'if', 'moreover', 'so', 'for instance', 'i think', 'what is more']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.232098765432 0.229887763892 101% => OK
Verbs: 0.167901234568 0.158761421928 106% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0864197530864 0.0866891130778 100% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0271604938272 0.046263068375 59% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0938271604938 0.0685040099705 137% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.101234567901 0.118717715034 85% => OK
Participles: 0.0271604938272 0.0351676179071 77% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.80835148369 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0296296296296 0.0309702414327 96% => OK
Particles: 0.00246913580247 0.00188951952338 131% => OK
Determiners: 0.0864197530864 0.0887237588012 97% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0148148148148 0.0209618222197 71% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00987654320988 0.0139019557991 71% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2160.0 2387.08602151 90% => OK
No of words: 365.0 408.028673835 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.91780821918 5.86048508987 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37092360658 4.48200974243 98% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.309589041096 0.338922669872 91% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.252054794521 0.251872472559 100% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.178082191781 0.174417080927 102% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.131506849315 0.112833075102 117% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80835148369 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 212.727598566 93% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.542465753425 0.524397521467 103% => OK
Word variations: 59.8129429022 59.2087087015 101% => OK
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6684587814 97% => OK
Sentence length: 18.25 20.5533526081 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.2338238341 48.84282405 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.0 120.699889404 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.25 20.5533526081 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.4 0.644075263715 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.54480286738 36% => OK
Readability: 43.4554794521 45.7405998639 95% => OK
Elegance: 1.24786324786 1.45489161554 86% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.436747779378 0.300154397459 146% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.103933125318 0.103427244359 100% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0720696440194 0.0752933317313 96% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.515391026216 0.497263757937 104% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.179021763227 0.151897553556 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.165302205003 0.114077575197 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0975413478158 0.0781384742642 125% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.371689137145 0.336927656856 110% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0237023001228 0.067059652881 35% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.292798211853 0.210909579961 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0565969262346 0.0618886996521 91% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8870967742 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.86379928315 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.91756272401 102% => OK
Positive topic words: 10.0 8.42114695341 119% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 2.4623655914 81% => OK
Neutral topic words: 5.0 2.75985663082 181% => OK
Total topic words: 17.0 13.6433691756 125% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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