TPO26 – Independent: A/D? It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parent's jobs than to choose jobs that very different from their parent's job.

Nowadays, people seek specific careers according to their interests. Most of available jobs in society are competitive and people have to gain certain skills. Although some people prefer to continue their parent’s jobs, other may find it more exciting to start a new job. In my opinion, people who choose similar careers to their parent’s jobs are more successful for several reasons.
The foremost reason why I am supporting this idea lies in the fact that most careers are very professional and need specific skills and knowledge. When a family have some crucial information about a job, they can pass it to next generation. For example, my father studied mathematics and he is a professor at university. When I decided to choose my major, he recommended me to study mathematics and I was familiar with all aspects of economy or business schools. So, his helps assist me to find an excellent job in our country.
Another subtle point that we should deem is the fact that genetics can affect our abilities. If you notice to athletes’ children, they pursue their parent’s fields and can be successful even more than their fathers or mothers. They inherit some significant characteristics which facilitate their accomplishment. Hence, people are more interested in following their families’ jobs.
Furthermore, it is reasonable that some people may hate their parent’s jobs because they cannot earn sufficient money or it is hard but they would not choose very different career. For instance, if their parents are nurse or technician at hospital, they prefer to study for medical school and be a doctor. It is unlikely that they apply for art and design department. Therefore, it is anticipated that children do not prefer significantly different jobs with their parents.
To sum up, due to the aforementioned arguments explored in the previous statements, I asserts that it is more logical that children continue jobs which are similar to their parent’s job and avoid dramatic changes.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 88, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[1]
Message: The pronoun 'I' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'assert'
Suggestion: assert
... explored in the previous statements, I asserts that it is more logical that children c...
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'furthermore', 'hence', 'if', 'may', 'so', 'therefore', 'for example', 'for instance', 'in my opinion', 'to sum up']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.214484679666 0.229887763892 93% => OK
Verbs: 0.16713091922 0.158761421928 105% => OK
Adjectives: 0.111420612813 0.0866891130778 129% => OK
Adverbs: 0.041782729805 0.046263068375 90% => OK
Pronouns: 0.114206128134 0.0685040099705 167% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.0863509749304 0.118717715034 73% => OK
Participles: 0.0139275766017 0.0351676179071 40% => Some participles wanted.
Conjunctions: 2.92126907657 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0389972144847 0.0309702414327 126% => OK
Particles: 0.00278551532033 0.00188951952338 147% => OK
Determiners: 0.050139275766 0.0887237588012 57% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.025069637883 0.0209618222197 120% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.016713091922 0.0139019557991 120% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2007.0 2387.08602151 84% => OK
No of words: 325.0 408.028673835 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.17538461538 5.86048508987 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24591054749 4.48200974243 95% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.381538461538 0.338922669872 113% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.295384615385 0.251872472559 117% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.221538461538 0.174417080927 127% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.147692307692 0.112833075102 131% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92126907657 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.569230769231 0.524397521467 109% => OK
Word variations: 62.2161501382 59.2087087015 105% => OK
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6684587814 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0555555556 20.5533526081 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.4164337873 48.84282405 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.5 120.699889404 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0555555556 20.5533526081 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.611111111111 0.644075263715 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.54480286738 18% => OK
Readability: 47.594017094 45.7405998639 104% => OK
Elegance: 0.974137931034 1.45489161554 67% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.498825458348 0.300154397459 166% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0935591096387 0.103427244359 90% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0579916536708 0.0752933317313 77% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.519524580476 0.497263757937 104% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.157345272567 0.151897553556 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.166783294291 0.114077575197 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0939278980599 0.0781384742642 120% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.222248008696 0.336927656856 66% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0474299850951 0.067059652881 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.309104478962 0.210909579961 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0836234031345 0.0618886996521 135% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8870967742 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.86379928315 52% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.91756272401 102% => OK
Positive topic words: 7.0 8.42114695341 83% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 2.4623655914 81% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.75985663082 72% => OK
Total topic words: 11.0 13.6433691756 81% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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When a family have some crucial information
When a family has some crucial information

Sentence: To sum up, due to the aforementioned arguments explored in the previous statements, I asserts that it is more logical that children continue jobs which are similar to their parent's job and avoid dramatic changes.
Description: A pronoun, personal, nominative, not 3rd person singular is not usually followed by a verb, present tense, 3rd person singular
Suggestion: Refer to I and asserts

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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 23 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 325 350
No. of Characters: 1622 1500
No. of Different Words: 186 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.246 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.991 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.758 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 122 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 93 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 64 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 37 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.056 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.13 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.556 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.299 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.299 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.11 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5