In my opinion, friendship is one of the most important things in our lives since we all have a moment needing someone who understand us to share our joy and sorrow, otherwise life will be way too tedious. Personally, I could not agree more with the statement that it is more important to keep your old friend than it is to make new friends. My view is based on my personal experience.
I have known this friend since my first year after graduation. She was one of my seniors' girlfriends at that time. If my memory serves me right, I was requested to give her a ride to the Christmas party of our academy. For that reason I had that girl's phone number, since then we occasionally chatted on the phone for the purpose of sharing my worries due to the fact that all my friends at that time were male except her. So for some topics regarding relationships with other females she was the only one I could consult to. As time gone by, our friendship became stronger, we trusted each other without any thoughts other than being real friends. Gradually, she had her own problems as well, I then became her mentor for some life issues conversely. Even though we met rarely, but it seemed that we completely understood each other, I think that is what we called "soul mates". During my training period abroad, we still contacted each other through MSN, by reason of the toughness of my training, she gave me so much mental support, I felt I was not alone at least there was someone who truly cared about me and asking no returns. We trusted each other very much so we also shared many embarrassing stories and bad deeds of ours. Till now, we can understand each other's feeling with a glimpse of the face or hearing the tone from the throat via telephone. I believe we can continuously be supportive to each other and make our lives more meaningful. That is why I assert that having a solid relationship with an old friend is better than making new friends.
To have new friends in life can bring us many surprises and opportunities in order to exploring the big world we live in. Some people love to make new friends all the time because new friends means more sources of income in some ways. But when it compares with the relationship with old friends, the latter is more profound, more spiritual, and more meaningful to me.
To sum up, both keeping our old friends and making new friends are beneficial to our lives, but the old friendship is just like a barrel of whisky, the longer it reserve the better taste it will be.
- TPO2-IndependentDo you agree or disagree with the following statement?Always telling the truth is the most important consideration in any relationship between people. 73
- TPO3-independentDo you agree or disagree with the following statement?It is more important to keep your old friends than it is to make new friends. 90
- TPO INTEGRATED 51 3
- TPO3-writing integrated 68
- Should the government invest money to improve Internet access or public transportation? 66
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 768, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[9]
Message: The adverb 'rarely' is usually put before the verb 'met'.
Suggestion: rarely met
... life issues conversely. Even though we met rarely, but it seemed that we completely under...
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Line 7, column 163, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'reserves'?
Suggestion: reserves
... like a barrel of whisky, the longer it reserve the better taste it will be.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, conversely, first, if, regarding, so, still, then, well, at least, i think, in my opinion, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 73.0 43.0788530466 169% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2075.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 460.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.51086956522 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6311565067 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51209832535 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 245.0 212.727598566 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.532608695652 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 638.1 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.1116829511 48.9658058833 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.75 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.55 5.45110844103 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.242946802161 0.236089414692 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0925638943375 0.076458572812 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.153262828066 0.0737576698707 208% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.207272370643 0.150856017488 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0837015890315 0.0645574589148 130% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 58.1214874552 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.17 10.9000537634 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.56 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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