Whereas some people consider the current generation have little impact on decisions that influence the future, others opposed the opinion by holding the opposite attitude. From my perspective, I firmly believe the latter group carries more weight and I will elaborate on my viewpoint in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, the younger generation has more leverage on the internet compared to the previous generation. After the internet was introduced to the world, human civilization became heavily dependent on such innovation and enjoy the convenience that accompany with. Obviously, the younger population is more familiar with the concept of utilizing the internet to interact and adapt to the internet environment more comfortably. For instance, the influencers on a variety of internet platforms are mostly people average under thirty years old, and the number drop significantly over years. Influencers on the internet can bring a great impact on how society's opinion thinks of certain events or statements. To be more specific, if famous influencers publish a personal opinion of a social incident, the public opinion is likely to be affected by the famous figure. Therefore, young people on the internet brings a direct impact on society.
Second, increasing numbers of technology corporations are founded by young people. To illustrate, in early 2020, Oxford University published an investigation about the average ages of the CEO of a technology company, the survey indicate the fact that most of the newly founded companies associated with innovative ideas and inventions that could bring positive influence to the public have a CEO that under forty years old, and the number drop significantly over recent years. As the result, the research demonstrates the fact that those who make the determinant are young people instead of older populations.
From what has been discussed above, we can safely draw a conclusion that the future of society is managed by young people due to the fact that not only do they control the internet, but only decides the direction of the corporation of the future.
- TOEFL T P O 43 Integrated Writing Task 3
- TPO32 integrated writing 75
- TPO32 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future ofsociety as a whole 76
- TPO 43 integrated writing 75
- Essay topics TPO 45 Integrated Writing Task 70
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 506, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'peopled'.
Suggestion: peopled
...ariety of internet platforms are mostly people average under thirty years old, and the...
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Line 3, column 761, Rule ID: PERSONAL_OPINION_FRIENDSHIP[1]
Message: Use simply 'opinion'.
Suggestion: opinion
...ecific, if famous influencers publish a personal opinion of a social incident, the public opinio...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, second, so, therefore, whereas, for instance, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 43.0788530466 35% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1787.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 335.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.33432835821 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27820116611 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8870008472 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.564179104478 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 576.0 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 78.9872283886 48.9658058833 161% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.461538462 100.406767564 137% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.7692307692 20.6045352989 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.23076923077 5.45110844103 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.161233154426 0.236089414692 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.056238415698 0.076458572812 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0317513301464 0.0737576698707 43% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0950086210647 0.150856017488 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00865994439736 0.0645574589148 13% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 11.7677419355 141% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 58.1214874552 65% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.93 10.9000537634 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.92 8.01818996416 124% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 86.8835125448 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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