TPO46 Integrated In the United States medical information about patients traditionally has been recorded and stored on paper forms However there are efforts to persuade doctors to adopt electronic medical record systems in which information about patie

The reading passage and the lecture have a discussion on the advantages of using electronic medical record systems. The author mentions three potential benefits. On the contrary, the professor considers none of them would be effective with certainty.

First, the reading suggests that cists can be reduced by using electronic medical record systems. However, the reading's opinion has been opposed by the lecturer with new proof. The professor says that doctors have usually kept paper records for emergency reasons, as the result, storing the paper records will still cost a lot of fortune. Hence, the opinion has been challenged heavily.

Moreover, the author claims that by utilizing electronic medical record systems, mistakes can be prevented, while the professor says that doctor tends to write with pen and paper when they talk to patients. After the clinic, records still have to be put on the computer by employees, mistakes are likely to happen during the process.

Finally, the reading believes that medical research will be benefits from electronic medical record systems. On the other hand, the professor in the listening material maintains that due to the privacy law, to reach data and information needs permission from patients, not to mention the complex process to acquire that. Thus, the opinion differs from the reading.

Therefore, the speaker departs totally from the opinions on the topic made in the reading.

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