Without not doubt, the twentieth century was the witness of many revolutions, in many levels. For instants, women rights, industrial revolution, the television, the man in the moon, etc. Saying all this, in my opinion, the most significant invention that provoked the bigest change from last century, was the computer. The reason for this is because computers became part of our life of everybody now, even affecting the ones that never have one, directly or indirectly. Consecuentetly, I believe that computrer provoked the most memorable change in the twentieth century.
To begin with, the most important feature of a computer system is the possibility of process data at high speed. Consequently, advances in technology, communication, and science, among others areas, could be accelerated in an way never seen before. To illustrate this idea, we can remember the arriving of the man to the moon. Most of the success of this achievement was thanks to the innovation and introduction of the computer in the way mathematic and logical calculation was made. As a result, one of the most memorable moment of the humanity could be braodcasted all around the world: a man stepping on the surface of the moon.
In addition to the above idea, the other big consequence of computer was the way it change communication. This was primarly because of the speed of the information and data transmitted, creating globalization in the communication. This is another reason why the invention of computers are for me so important from my point of view.
Finally, computers became part of our every day life. It is important to remember how in the last century computers were big, expensive, and noisy machines. Consequently, only a few companies could afford to buy and maintain a computer. Now, after a few years, computers are small, affordable and silence devices accessible for many people. For instance, computers are so important in our society, that became an essential part of our education. Today, every elementary school has a computer lab, as well as, a library. Again, for all those reason, I support the idea that computers are the reason of the most important change in our history.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that computers are the most memorable invention that provoked the most dramatic change in the twentieth century.
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Grammar and spelling correct…
Grammar and spelling correct:
Without a doubt, the twentieth century was the witness of many revolutions, on many levels. For instants, women's rights, the industrial revolution, the television, the man on the moon, etc. Saying all this, in my opinion, the most significant invention that provoked the biggest change from the last century, was the computer. The reason for this is because computers became part of our life of everybody now, even affecting the ones that never have one, directly or indirectly. Consequently, I believe that the computer provoked the most memorable change in the twentieth century.
To begin with, the most important feature of a computer system is the possibility of process data at high speed. Consequently, advances in technology, communication, and science, among others areas, could be accelerated in a way never seen before. To illustrate this idea, we can remember the arrival of man on the moon. Most of the success of this achievement was thanks to the innovation and introduction of the computer in the way mathematics and logical calculation was made. As a result, one of the most memorable moments of humanity could be broadcasted all around the world: a man stepping on the surface of the moon.
In addition to the above idea, the other big consequence of computers was the way they change communication. This was primarily because of the speed of the information and data transmitted, creating globalization in communication. This is another reason why the invention of computers is for me so important from my point of view.
Finally, computers became part of our everyday life. It is important to remember how in the last century computers were big, expensive, and noisy machines. Consequently, only a few companies could afford to buy and maintain a computer. Now, after a few years, computers are small, affordable, and silent devices accessible for many people. For instance, computers are so important in our society, that became an essential part of our education. Today, every elementary school has a computer lab, as well as, a library. Again, for all those reasons, I support the idea that computers are the reason for the most important change in our history.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that computers are the most memorable invention that provoked the most dramatic change in the twentieth century.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 340, Rule ID: REASON_IS_BECAUSE[1]
Message: Probably an incorrect phrase. Use 'the reason 'is that''.
Suggestion: is that
..., was the computer. The reason for this is because computers became part of our life of ev...
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Line 3, column 224, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...g others areas, could be accelerated in an way never seen before. To illustrate th...
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Line 5, column 85, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'changes'?
Suggestion: changes
... consequence of computer was the way it change communication. This was primarly becaus...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, finally, if, so, well, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, as well as, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.0752688172 223% => Less nominalization wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1962.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 382.0 407.700716846 94% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13612565445 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42095241839 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9862719627 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 212.727598566 88% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.489528795812 0.524837075471 93% => OK
syllable_count: 627.3 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 27.2559049335 48.9658058833 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 93.4285714286 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1904761905 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.28571428571 5.45110844103 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.108885371488 0.236089414692 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0358612526285 0.076458572812 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0391316573975 0.0737576698707 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0688909695444 0.150856017488 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0411996871089 0.0645574589148 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.04 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 65.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.5 Out of 30
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