The twentieth century saw great change. In your opinion, what is one change that should be remembered about the twentieth century? Use specific reasons and details to explain your cho
There are many milestones in 20 century, for instance, the discover of penicillin, the second world war or the fall of Berlin Wall. Nonetheless, in my opinion the landing on the Moon has a far greater impact in our lives, as Neil Amstrong said, “a small step for a man, a giant leap for mankind”.
Firstly, landing on the Moon gave hope to human being. It is not a secret that in the last century, we have seen weather changes, floods, iceberg melting and other phenomena that could be attributed to humanity activities on earth. Moreover, some scientist says that life on earth has a date of expire. Therefore, being able to get to the moon, opened a new path for the survival of our specie, in other words, the live beyond our planet. For example, when I was a kid, I used to read a book where the humans had a military base on the moon.
Secondly, and foremost is the development of new technology. Whatever the place we look at, it is quite normal to see many devices that works using technology derived from the space challenge. For instance we can consider the mobile phones, because they are based within a satellite network. Other example is the internet, it is only possible due to the development of new satellites and the improvement of communications systems.
Thirdly, the fact of landing on the moon have also had political consequences, which are visible until these days. The development of new and powerful ballistic missile is, in opinion of scientists, a direct consequence of the spatial race lived through the cool war, in fact, the technology used for put a rocket in space it is quite similar that technology used for sending intercontinental Ballistic Missile.
To conclude, the 20 century has had many different milestone’s and discovery’s that have the merits to be named, however, focusing in the task of choosing one of them, I choose the landing on the moon, because of the huge impact in the way that we perceive the live beyond our planet, all the technology improvements and the geopolitical consequences derived from it.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 33, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'century' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'centuries'.
Suggestion: centuries
There are many milestones in 20 century, for instance, the discover of penicill...
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Line 1, column 56, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...milestones in 20 century, for instance, the discover of penicillin, the second world war or ...
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Line 2, column 542, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...humans had a military base on the moon. Secondly, and foremost is the developmen...
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Line 3, column 369, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... only possible due to the development of new satellites and the improvement of co...
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Line 5, column 37, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...e. To conclude, the 20 century has had many different milestone's and discovery's t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, look, moreover, nonetheless, second, secondly, so, therefore, third, thirdly, for example, for instance, in fact, in my opinion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1723.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 357.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.82633053221 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34677393335 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9101767692 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.563025210084 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 552.6 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 10.0 3.08781362007 324% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 86.6243650034 48.9658058833 177% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.071428571 100.406767564 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5 20.6045352989 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.0714285714 5.45110844103 240% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.055303452068 0.236089414692 23% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0155757362819 0.076458572812 20% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0187320547768 0.0737576698707 25% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.031491794253 0.150856017488 21% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0174810641862 0.0645574589148 27% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 11.7677419355 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.03 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.77 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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