In the last few decades, as time has passed, the overall economic growth of people has raised the standard of living. Nowadays, comparatively more people are investing money in automobiles compared to the past years. In this regard, some people contend that usage of cars will be growing in upcoming years. On the other hand, there are some people who think that people will put control over buying new cars. Certainly, from my vantage point, the former view contains more weight. For the following paragraphs, I will delve into the most conspicuous reasons and examples justifying my stance.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that the developing world is rapidly urbanizing, which means that people are migrating to urban places. Accordingly, more people will need to drive cars in order to reach their workplaces that usually are located far from urban areas. In the past, people used to live in villages and engaged in agricultural activities. Drawing from my friend, Simon’s example sheds light on what has been elaborated above. His grandparents worked as a farmer in the village area and thereby, they did not require to drive every day. On the contrary, Simon moved to the city area last year as he got a job in a private firm which was thirty kilometers away from his home. As a result of that, Simon has to drive a car from his home to his workplace. In fact, most of his co-workers do the same. Thus, I can see no future where people will stop using cars.
Another noteworthy point is that no one can deny the fact that the advancement of technology and science has drastically affected the automobile sector. To be more precise, every few years manufactured companies come up with the new lucrative features of cars in order to attract more buyers. Unfortunately, people blindly invest their money to buy a new version of a car in return to get advanced facilities regardless of their real need for automobiles. To give a more vivid picture, research conducted at the University of California on buyers who bought cars in the last decade and result was shocking because a graph was constantly rising in ten years. Hence, it is reasonable to say if people did not stop buying cars in the past, they would definitely not stop doing that in the next twenty years.
All in all, by contemplating all remarks, I strongly feel that in the future there will be more vehicles on the road. This is because people who live in modern areas are required to travel far for work purposes, and growing economical conditions around the world will provoke people to buy more automobiles in the near days.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 543, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'driving'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'require' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: driving
... area and thereby, they did not require to drive every day. On the contrary, Simon moved...
^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 225, Rule ID: ECONOMICAL_ECONOMIC[1]
Message: Did you mean 'economic' (=connected with economy)?
Suggestion: economic
...avel far for work purposes, and growing economical conditions around the world will provok...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, first, hence, if, so, thus, as to, in fact, as a result, on the contrary, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 71.0 52.1666666667 136% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2170.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 453.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.79028697572 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61343653406 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60953110694 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 244.0 212.727598566 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.538631346578 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 686.7 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.8986097684 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.6363636364 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5909090909 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.72727272727 5.45110844103 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.145729421845 0.236089414692 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0438045930624 0.076458572812 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.038528063833 0.0737576698707 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0896707266116 0.150856017488 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0216814999875 0.0645574589148 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.5 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.39 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 86.8835125448 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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