The university has provided students who are going to enter university with two summer vacation programs. Which one do you think is better for students?
1) Take some college courses in advance
2) Visit some history museums or historical relics
in today`s sophisticated and progressive world, making an opportunity for students to participate in vacation which is programmed by the university a really novel idea. In this line of thought, a group of people might prefer taking part in some courses which are related to their field of study in the university as a trip for familiarizing themselves with universities condition, while many others' choices might be different. Others could choose to visit historical places or museums as their trip. I, personally, concur with the latter group and there are some reasons for that. I will explain my reasons in the following paragraphs.
First of all, joining the trip out of the university will help the students to become more active and happy. To elucidate this notion in a vivid picture, students have to be in the university all the time of their study length, so that they might be tired and the college condition could depress them, but by visiting new places they will be motivated and receive inspiration from the new environment. In fact, being in one place for a long period of time increase the risk of mental as well as physical problems. For example, while I had to study for SAT I didn’t visit anywhere for more than 4 months and I just had been in my room after a while I become anxious, and even serious and strong headaches have also occurred to me. That is why I think the trip out of the university could help students for staying healthy and cherry.
Secondly, some students might have a class related to history, and visiting those places could help them with better grades. To explain it, history is among hard courses and without having a background of some important happenings which have happened during the history taking part in this course could make serious problems for students. While people see those historical places and taking notes, they become familiar and also they will learn what they might study in their future classes. For instance, my brother went to the museum and gain valuable knowledge about some paintings. A year later while most of his classmates had a problem with knowing the topic related to the paintings he gained the best score easily in that course. Therefore, by taking part in those kinds of trips one could bring advantages.
In the light of reasons that are mentioned above, attending a historical trip not only prevent students from being depressed but also it is going to help them with better advantageous in university by receiving better grades.
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- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Universities should require every graduation student to take public speaking courses Give specific examples and details to support your answer 76
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: In
in today's sophisticated and progress...
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Line 2, column 442, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
... In fact, being in one place for a long period of time increase the risk of mental as well as ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, really, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, while, for example, for instance, i think, in fact, as well as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2095.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 430.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.87209302326 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55372829156 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59416598035 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 650.7 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 69.0792133443 48.9658058833 141% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.235294118 100.406767564 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.2941176471 20.6045352989 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.52941176471 5.45110844103 156% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.316140052953 0.236089414692 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102948917186 0.076458572812 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0596910298737 0.0737576698707 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.203726636916 0.150856017488 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0464683334279 0.0645574589148 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 11.7677419355 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.07 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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