What historical event in your country has had a major effect

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What historical event in your country has had a major effect

In the every country war is dangerous; in fact, it is bad historical event in every country also in my country. In addition we had a hazardous war in my country on 30 years ago; indeed, we had bad days in long period and when I talk about it I'm so sad because my uncle was dead in the battle.

To begin with, war cause that people of country impoverish in the long battle even after can more effective however people of my land lived with difficulty; as a result, they decided that working with effort and trying together that were successful but they had not job and did not found affair; in fact, war caused that they could not found any task for continue; thus, a lot of people had not affair and lived hardly.

Second of all, war caused that people had bad feeling and some days are aggressive and suffering; indeed, they did not like continue to live; in fact, they had not incentive to continue and some their children went to for battle and dead in the war.

Most importantly, it caused that reduce economic in your country; in fact, it is very important in every country that rate of war is very high; thus, this could impair economic of your country in other hand war injury to rate of my land and we could not yet that compensate.

Overall, I believes that war could effective in every country also in my country that include impoverish and bad feeling and reduce to economic of country.

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it is bad historical event
it is a bad historical event

we had bad days in long period
we had bad days in a long period

Sentence: Second of all, war caused that people had bad feeling and some days are aggressive and suffering; indeed, they did not like continue to live; in fact, they had not incentive to continue and some their children went to for battle and dead in the war.
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Sentence: Most importantly, it caused that reduce economic in your country; in fact, it is very important in every country that rate of war is very high; thus, this could impair economic of your country in other hand war injury to rate of my land and we could not yet that compensate.
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Suggestion: Refer to that and reduce
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Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace yet with adjective

Sentence: Overall, I believes that war could effective in every country also in my country that include impoverish and bad feeling and reduce to economic of country.
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Suggestion: Refer to I and believes
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Suggestion: Refer to could and effective

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Score: 12 in 30
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No. of Grammatical Errors: 9 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 6 15
No. of Words: 260 350
No. of Characters: 1108 1500
No. of Different Words: 116 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.016 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.262 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.177 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 68 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 44 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 25 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 15 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 43.333 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 17.997 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 1 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.575 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.924 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.294 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5