When people consider a major purchase, which of the following has the greatest impact on their choices?
1. Recommendation from friends
2. Information from magazines
3. Reviews from online communities
As the internet market has been being spread, more people could buy products conveniently at their home, so they buy more products than the past. Accordingly, importance of purchasing products becomes greater significant. Some people think the reviews of the internet or magazines provide reliable information. However, in my opinion, I prefer to get recommendation from friends. It is because they would offer honest reviews and recommend the products that are proper to me.
To begin with, friends would provide accurate review with respect of the product without lie. In the internet communities or magazines, some people evaluate the products excessively than real information. Meanwhile, friends commend the useful products for me. For example, my friends Mark saw the review in the internet and bought a computer. In the review, the speed of computer is fast and also it had a good design. However, after using it a few, he realized that it is not only the capacity of storage is insufficient, but also it did not fast as the review. He knew that the reviews and advertisement of the Internet was overestimated. He always told me that I should not have bought the computer.
In addition, friends could recommend the appropriate products. The reason is that they know my habits and life style by spending a lot of time with me. Moreover, some friends who have similar preference could commend more suitable products. For instance, my uncle Steve has bought shoes that are suitable him by the recommendation of his friends. He liked to climb a mountain, but the shoes for climbing are too expensive. Accordingly, he would often climb with wearing normal shoes, so he always got scarce during climbing. However, his friend James who liked to climb as Steve recommend climbing shoes that are cheap and also high quality. Subsequently, Steve bought them and he could enjoy climbing without any hurts.
To sum up, as I mentioned above, the recommendation of friends has many advantages such as giving trustworthy reviews about the products and suggest fitting product to me. In this regard, I firmly believe that recommendation from friends has the greatest impact on people’s choice.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, however, if, moreover, so, while, for example, for instance, in addition, such as, in my opinion, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1852.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 359.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.15877437326 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35284910392 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86850468836 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.506963788301 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 550.8 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.3700899502 48.9658058833 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 80.5217391304 100.406767564 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.6086956522 20.6045352989 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.34782608696 5.45110844103 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.128130226084 0.236089414692 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0414870840481 0.076458572812 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0575418325287 0.0737576698707 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0989418631589 0.150856017488 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.060961098083 0.0645574589148 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.35 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.64 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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