When people succeed, it is because of hard work. Luck has nothing to do with success." Do you agree or disagree with the quotation above? Use specific reasons and examples to explain your position.

Submitted by wbrunis on Thu, 01/11/2018 - 17:09

Nowadays, it is hardest get a good job. In today’s world more and more competitive, and even when people are prepared for an opportunity many times is not easy to get a job. I believe that apart from has been prepared correctly, the luck is important to has been prepared at the right time to get a good opportunity. I think this way because a couple of reasons and I will explore in the following essay.

First of all, the unemployment’s rate increase in the last years. So, even when people are prepare for some functions, they have to fight to getting hired. For example, I finished my college last year at Brazil in a good university, the course what I did was mining engineering and until today I did not get a job. Some jobs’ areas are more specific and certainly, these areas are most difficult to get a job. In my case, my country is fighting against a bad moment politic and economic, however i believe soon it will better again.

Second, many times people choose some course due to the fact that course is good for that moment. For example, the people attend colleges or universities because they know someone which is succeed in his work. Still in my case, there is no doubt that mining engineering is seasonal, sometimes is good and sometimes is not, but the fact is, nowadays, it is not more a local crisis but a whole world crisis.

Finally concluding, people can be succeed, but it is hardest more and more because of competition and rise of unemployment’s rate. The luck is very important when consider many factors like for instance politics and economics.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 14, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'is the hardest'.
Suggestion: is the hardest
Nowadays, it is hardest get a good job. In today's world m...
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Line 3, column 507, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...ad moment politic and economic, however i believe soon it will better again. S...
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Line 5, column 190, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'succeeded'.
Suggestion: succeeded
...ties because they know someone which is succeed in his work. Still in my case, there is...
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Line 5, column 211, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Still,
...w someone which is succeed in his work. Still in my case, there is no doubt that mini...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 361, Rule ID: MORE_A_JJ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'a more local'?
Suggestion: a more local
...t, but the fact is, nowadays, it is not more a local crisis but a whole world crisis. Fin...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Finally,
...cal crisis but a whole world crisis. Finally concluding, people can be succeed, but ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, however, if, second, so, still, apart from, for example, for instance, i think, no doubt, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 43.0788530466 56% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 52.1666666667 46% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1323.0 1977.66487455 67% => OK
No of words: 282.0 407.700716846 69% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.6914893617 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09790868904 4.48103885553 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81764088306 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 146.0 212.727598566 69% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.517730496454 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 430.2 618.680645161 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.9239975719 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.5 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1428571429 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.78571428571 5.45110844103 161% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.105095977095 0.236089414692 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0410809216273 0.076458572812 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0349742728523 0.0737576698707 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0741426976616 0.150856017488 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0247466001241 0.0645574589148 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.92 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.48 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 86.8835125448 59% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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