In modern life, people have learned that how important education is. Education affects the whole country quality by itself. There are lots of different technics for finding the best education system. However, sometimes schools has problems with adequate teacher numbers or funding. For that reason, there is a hot topic of debate between people. Some people believe that physical education classes should be cut in this situation, while others believe that courses in art and music should be eliminated first. Although it is a highly controversial topic, for me the former opinion carries more weight. In the following, I will elaborate on why I support this idea.
The foremost reason why I am supporting this idea is that cutting physical education classes don't affect the students who want to do sport activities because there are so many opportunities outside for them and not much expensive at all. They are so affordable. They can go fitness centers or find a amateur team in order to teach young children how to play team sports. For example, I went to Fenerbahce sports club when I was in high school and I earned so many medals in volleyball from competitions by preparing with them.
On the other hand, for me another subtle point is that arts and music classes are more expensive outside and few of them. Moreover, if I have to be honest, the students don't have so much interests in arts and music in general. By giving them this courses in school can be more effective, because everybody should have some knowledge about arts and music at some point. In my opinion, school is the exact and convenient place to learn these classes. For instance, I have learned so many important things from those classes in high school and I don't think I could learn them from somewhere else.
Due to the aforementioned argument explored in the previous statements, I believe that if there is not enough funding or teachers, school management should cut the physical education classes instead of arts and music classes.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider using third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'affects'.
Suggestion: affects
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Message: The proper name in singular (Education) must be used with a third-person verb: 'affects'.
Suggestion: affects
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Suggestion: don't
...that cutting physical education classes dont affect the students who want to do spor...
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
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Suggestion: don't
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Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...from those classes in high school and I dont think I could learn them from somewhere...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, moreover, so, while, for example, for instance, in general, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1681.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 342.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.91520467836 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30037696126 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59220874645 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.535087719298 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 523.8 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.2433260787 48.9658058833 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.3888888889 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.22222222222 5.45110844103 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.385936084008 0.236089414692 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100483119562 0.076458572812 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.137833089616 0.0737576698707 187% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.233058088037 0.150856017488 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0899333956689 0.0645574589148 139% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.86 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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