Which way is the best for students to make new friends: joining a sport team, participating in community activities, or travelling?

Friends are important to everyone, they are the person that we want to share news and quality times with. Some people would contented with old friends that they already have, as it is comfortable to spend time with someone you know best. However, I tended to disagree with the statement that keeping old friends is important to make new friends.

For starters, it is impossible to avoid meeting new people and getting to know them. People in the past tend to grew apart as time goes by, whether we like it or not. As time flies by, old friends parted when life diverged into different path, interest, goals. People win some, and lose some. As for me, even though I want to, it is hard for me to keep touch with every old friends in kinder garden, premilary and middle school. Some were lost touch because we went to different schools and have different social circle, some were cut lose because we have different agendas in life.

Also, there is nothing guilty to make new friends outside of one's comfort zone. New people, they represents our chances to explore a whole new different world from our old past. One can discover fresh topic or interest with another. I once met some new friends when I participated a music festival when I traveled to a new country, they showed me a lifestyle that I would not have the opportunity to encounter in my routine life, which was eye opening for me. Besides, new friends can turned into old friends, too.

Friends are the ones that made from strangers to people that we know and love. New friends are as good as old friends as long as they are good friends. It is not only important to keep touch with old friends, but also important to make new friends.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 125, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'content'
Suggestion: content
...d quality times with. Some people would contented with old friends that they already have...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 62, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...g guilty to make new friends outside of ones comfort zone. New people, they represen...
^^^^
Line 5, column 98, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'represent'
Suggestion: represent
... of ones comfort zone. New people, they represents our chances to explore a whole new diff...
^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, however, if, so, as for, you know

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1398.0 1977.66487455 71% => OK
No of words: 307.0 407.700716846 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.55374592834 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18585898806 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.27340095866 2.67179642975 85% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 212.727598566 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.517915309446 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 427.5 618.680645161 69% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.94265232975 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.5917677381 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.2352941176 100.406767564 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0588235294 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.11764705882 5.45110844103 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.147981751733 0.236089414692 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0550828830989 0.076458572812 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0545563264097 0.0737576698707 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104375808216 0.150856017488 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0515233572531 0.0645574589148 80% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.81 10.9000537634 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.9 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 46.0 86.8835125448 53% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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