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who influences more friends or teacher.

In my opinion influence of some one matters more on the age in which we meet them. Like in younger stage we all were so overwhelmed by our teacher and after attaining certain age we start to listen what are friends say. There are several reasons to hold this opinion, which I will explain in the below paragraphs.

To begin with, lets move in chronological order. When we were in primary school, we always listened to our teacher. Teacher were our mentor, we all were so obedient towards them, sometime we even listen to them more then our parents because we shared a different bond which include the mixed feeling of respect, scaredness. They influences us in a ways like they always said us to study and they used to give reward for our action, like if we score good grades they give us candies or good remark. So, in such a way that bond got stronger with time. The other reason we get influence by them is we spent a lot of time with them from morning to afternoon and 1 hour in the evening, so we get attached to them and listen everything they says. For example, when I was in a school I was so influenced by my teacher that I wanted to become a Teacher. I attain the epitome of the influence when at home I started to play games where I become the teacher and ask all my friends to become students, and I started behaving same as teacher. I used to carry extra candies and gifts for my teacher. So, that was the age when I think most students were so obsessed teacher. That time we were not much into friendship. We were obedient, disciplined students.

However, when we grow and reach at a certain age and realised that now we don't share everything with our teacher, so we seek for a friendship, and once that bond has made, I bet no one can influence us. In the 20's I share everything with my friend, she always supports me, help me to understand everything, talk to me in my bad time, so in this way we get so attached that our every action is related. our even schedule of the days matches and that really help both .For, example, in my exam time, we used to make a time table were we study at same time and take a break at same time. To be honest she started studing because I was studies. The other thing she influenced me in reading books, she reads a lot of books and earlier I was not much into reading but one day she narrated the story and that was so amazing that I asked about the book and she gave me her book for reading. She help me in dressing. We share the ideas and our decision were so related. SO, once we become close to someone our action depends on other person.

To put it in a nutshell, I believe influence of a person depends on to whom we are close and emotionally attached

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 28, Rule ID: ANY_BODY[1]
Message: Did you mean 'someone'?
Suggestion: someone
In my opinion influence of some one matters more on the age in which we mee...
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Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
...m, sometime we even listen to them more then our parents because we shared a differe...
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Line 3, column 330, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'They' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'influence'
Suggestion: influence
...ed feeling of respect, scaredness. They influences us in a ways like they always said us t...
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Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'say'
Suggestion: say
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Message: “So , that” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
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...e days matches and that really help both .For, example, in my exam time, we used t...
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...ideas and our decision were so related. SO, once we become close to someone our action d...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, really, so, then, for example, i think, in my opinion, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 98.0 43.0788530466 227% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2200.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 518.0 407.700716846 127% => OK
Chars per words: 4.2471042471 4.8611393121 87% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.77070365392 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.35384478303 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.447876447876 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 709.2 618.680645161 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.8339134996 48.9658058833 134% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.6666666667 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5833333333 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.58333333333 5.45110844103 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.156554937125 0.236089414692 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0532211347389 0.076458572812 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0625984366674 0.0737576698707 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11704890395 0.150856017488 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0548471956995 0.0645574589148 85% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.4 11.7677419355 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.37 10.9000537634 68% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.9 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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