Why do you think some people are attracted to dangerous sports or other dangerous activities? Use specific reasons and examples
Sports impact our life significantly. There are numerous reasons of playing risky sports and doing dangerous activities. In my opinion, people like to do highly risk activities because of money and fame.
To begin with, majority of dangerous performers get paid a great money. Since they have unique skills that most people do not have, their paycheck is high. The riskier activities they do, more money they gain. For example, Ahmed Manofal, which is a top one paid car racer in the middle east. Recently, revealed in an interview with Success magazine that, even though his career is very risky and could get him killed one day, he would never consider shifting to other job, simply because it is not easy to maintain such a high quality lifestyle by working in safer field. Moreover, he stated that he gains roughly $2 million dollars in each car race a long with other many benefits.
Secondly, many people tend to enjoy being popular, asked for a picture or photograph. Nothing could achieve that easier than doing crazy activities and attract audience. For instance, my sister Sara, she tried a lot of ways to make herself famous without a success. At the beginning, she tried filming a comedy clips and post it in social media in order to gain some popularity, but that did not work well for her. However, when she started a job as a lion trainer in our national zoo, all the TV channels started doing an interview with her. People on the streets are stopping her and asking for a signature. Despite our warnings to her that working with lions is not safe, and there is a high possibility that she could hurt herself really bad, she did not care at all. Moreover, she mentioned that her fame is what matters the most.
In conclusion, people like to do risky activities. Not only because of the money, but also, for the purpose of fame.
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- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement In the past it was easier to identify what type of career or job would lead to a secure successful future Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer 60
- Why do you think some people are attracted to dangerous sports or other dangerous activities Use specific reasons and examples 70
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement In the past it was easier to identify what type of career or job would lead to a secure successful future Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer 60
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, moreover, really, second, secondly, so, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1527.0 1977.66487455 77% => OK
No of words: 324.0 407.700716846 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.71296296296 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24264068712 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.39060892873 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.608024691358 0.524837075471 116% => OK
syllable_count: 470.7 618.680645161 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 53.1233342577 48.9658058833 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.3684210526 100.406767564 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0526315789 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.36842105263 5.45110844103 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.171010154685 0.236089414692 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0584742366927 0.076458572812 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0647652429198 0.0737576698707 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123624700793 0.150856017488 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0815194626307 0.0645574589148 126% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 11.7677419355 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.74 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.04 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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