Community is a place where we live and it’s surrounding area and environment is an important part of community. If we want’s to total development of any area we need develop our community structurally. If I have able to spend some hours to develop our community I would like to spend my time to education sector of our community. For a few significant reasons I wants to spend my time to develop education facility in my community. My reasons go as follows.
Firstly, education is one of the basic needs for human. If we want to live our life smoothly, socially and happily we need education. It gives knowledge what is good? What is bad? What is way to live a happy life? I live in a poor village named magura, it’s a small part of Bangladesh. Most of the people are uneducated. If I have able spend some time to educate them such as old age school. If I will able to educate them it will help them to reduce social conflict and create smooth life.
In addition, children are a key element to improve your society. If student are well educated they help the society and country. In my community only one school for education purpose and most of the child are involve in working to help their family. I would create a school that give them free education and training about work. It well help them to develop their family condition and if they get basic education they are aware about society and environment.
Finally, community developments have many aspects so if we want to develop our community many tools are available, such as education, environment, social conflict, employment, training. In my view education is the most important element to development of community. It gives us a complete pack of development. In sum, if we develop out education facility it helps the community.
- TPO 45 3
- You have decided to give several hours of your time each month to improve the community where you live. What is one thing you will do to improve your community? Why? Use pecific reasons and details to explain your choice. 60
- TPO 21 Integrated Essay 70
- TPO-41 - Integrated Writing Task Burning coal in power plants produces a waste product called coal ash, a material that contains small amounts of potentially harmful chemicals Environmentalists in the United States are concerned about the damage such harm 73
- TPO 40: Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school. Do you think this is a good idea? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 60
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 213, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...eed develop our community structurally. If I have able to spend some hours to deve...
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Line 2, column 373, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[1]
Message: The pronoun 'I' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'want'
Suggestion: want
...munity. For a few significant reasons I wants to spend my time to develop education f...
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Line 6, column 210, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'involved'.
Suggestion: involved
...ation purpose and most of the child are involve in working to help their family. I woul...
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Line 6, column 338, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'helps'?
Suggestion: helps
...cation and training about work. It well help them to develop their family condition ...
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Line 8, column 333, Rule ID: CONFUSION_OF_OUR_OUT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'our'?
Suggestion: our
...k of development. In sum, if we develop out education facility it helps the communi...
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Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...tion facility it helps the community.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, firstly, if, so, well, in addition, such as, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 11.0286738351 18% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.0752688172 235% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1504.0 1977.66487455 76% => OK
No of words: 316.0 407.700716846 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.75949367089 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21620550194 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80823719127 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 146.0 212.727598566 69% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.462025316456 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 508.5 618.680645161 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Interrogative: 2.0 0.994623655914 201% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.1344086022 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.7936074128 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 65.3913043478 100.406767564 65% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.7391304348 20.6045352989 67% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.08695652174 5.45110844103 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.133846077789 0.236089414692 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0444389365596 0.076458572812 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0377464868803 0.0737576698707 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0824430769871 0.150856017488 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0168065909389 0.0645574589148 26% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.9 11.7677419355 67% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.28 58.1214874552 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.74 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.28 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 86.8835125448 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.0537634409 72% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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