You have decided to give several hours of your time each month to improve the community where you live. What is one thing you will do to improve your community? Why? Use specific reasons and details to explain your choice.
When it comes to the issue that what is the best activity to improve our community? Surely, different people can give various answers according to where they live. As far as I am concerned, I prefer to allocate some part of my spare time for improve a park, which is near my house. I take this position on account for the following reasons.
First and the most important reason is that the park now is full of garbage and also many addicted people use it as habitations. Hence, t is quite normal people dislike to spend their time in there, while there is not any recreational place such as movie theaters or swimming pools. In this way, if we can clean the park from trashes and addicted people, most people tend to come here to have joy times with their family. Furthermore, the park is scenic and people can have pleasant experience by going there. I think that a small example can give some light on this matter. There is a small jungle that allows you to enjoy walking through it, which is like an awesome paint in the fall. In winter when snow covers every where, you can enjoy its pleasant silence. In spring and summer, you can enjoy seeing birds’ dance or hearing their songs.
A further point we must consider is that youths, who lives here, like most people are boring and need some activities to keep them busy and out of troubles. About five years ago, the park had plenty of sport facilities such as a field of soccer, cycling road for riding bike and skate boarding. When I as a child, my friends and I went there for soccer practice after time school, while there now is nothing to attract juveniles. In this way, we can draw juveniles’ attention on here by improving our updating sports facilities is in the park.
Apart from point I made above, the park can have a crucial role to increase people’s health. As we all know, people who lives in cities are exposure many contamination like air pollution, which put their healthy on the line. The park have can be a best place for trees, which absorb carbon dioxide and release oxygen. Moreover, here is a small lake that it can keep balance humanity in the air. All in all, the park can ameliorate the environmental issue and enhance the level of people’s health.
All above evidence supports this undeniable fact that this park is suitable place especially for spending weekends and doing sport activities. In addition, it decreases the air pollution and increase people’s health. As a result, it is logically I tend to spend several hours of my time each month to improve the park.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 162, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'dislike spending'.
Suggestion: dislike spending
...ations. Hence, t is quite normal people dislike to spend their time in there, while there is not...
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Line 3, column 716, Rule ID: EVERY_WHERE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'everywhere'?
Suggestion: everywhere
...in the fall. In winter when snow covers every where, you can enjoy its pleasant silence. In...
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Line 7, column 155, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun contamination seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much contamination', 'a good deal of contamination'.
Suggestion: much contamination; a good deal of contamination
...people who lives in cities are exposure many contamination like air pollution, which put their hea...
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Line 7, column 252, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[1]
Message: Use 'the' with the superlative.
Suggestion: the
...althy on the line. The park have can be a best place for trees, which absorb carb...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'first', 'furthermore', 'hence', 'if', 'moreover', 'so', 'while', 'apart from', 'i think', 'in addition', 'such as', 'as a result']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.250950570342 0.229887763892 109% => OK
Verbs: 0.148288973384 0.158761421928 93% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0665399239544 0.0866891130778 77% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0437262357414 0.046263068375 95% => OK
Pronouns: 0.06463878327 0.0685040099705 94% => OK
Prepositions: 0.11216730038 0.118717715034 94% => OK
Participles: 0.0209125475285 0.0351676179071 59% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.49576976631 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0247148288973 0.0309702414327 80% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0874524714829 0.0887237588012 99% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0228136882129 0.0209618222197 109% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0247148288973 0.0139019557991 178% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2583.0 2387.08602151 108% => OK
No of words: 458.0 408.028673835 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.63973799127 5.86048508987 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62611441266 4.48200974243 103% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.288209606987 0.338922669872 85% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.211790393013 0.251872472559 84% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.126637554585 0.174417080927 73% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0764192139738 0.112833075102 68% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49576976631 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 244.0 212.727598566 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.532751091703 0.524397521467 102% => OK
Word variations: 62.6267509314 59.2087087015 106% => OK
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6684587814 116% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0833333333 20.5533526081 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 28.3470555006 48.84282405 58% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.625 120.699889404 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0833333333 20.5533526081 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.541666666667 0.644075263715 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.54480286738 72% => OK
Readability: 40.2623726346 45.7405998639 88% => OK
Elegance: 1.4962962963 1.45489161554 103% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.261575634375 0.300154397459 87% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0759620208993 0.103427244359 73% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0433200805709 0.0752933317313 58% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.460348082084 0.497263757937 93% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.0960314748455 0.151897553556 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0942071089279 0.114077575197 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0759925864277 0.0781384742642 97% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.335364618533 0.336927656856 100% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0403200231258 0.067059652881 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.183849738955 0.210909579961 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.069398805096 0.0618886996521 112% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8870967742 151% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.86379928315 52% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.91756272401 81% => OK
Positive topic words: 10.0 8.42114695341 119% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 2.4623655914 81% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.75985663082 72% => OK
Total topic words: 14.0 13.6433691756 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.