You have received a gift of money. The money is enough to buy either a piece of jwellery you like or tickets to a sconcert you want to attend. Which would you buy? Use specific reasons or details to support your answer.
No one can deny the fact that we all love to receive gift either it is in the form of money or things. In the given scenario, it is said whether I choose to buy ornament or ticket of concert if someday I receive enough cash as a present. Meanwhile, I am of the opinion that I would rather spend my money in buying jwellery than concert ticket. I feel this way for several reasons which I will explore in the subsequent paragraphs.
To start with, cash as a present is the best gift one can get because it can be expend in whatever ways we like. Similary, investing money in jwellery can be beneficial in many ways. To be more precise, nobody knows what the future holds which means we never know what situation might occur in upcoming future. So, in case of emergency even if we run out of money we can sell our jwellery and can save from complicate situation. I have witnessed this from my own personal experience. Last year, I had to pay my college fee within the deadline however we didn’t have enough money at home. In that condition, I somehow managed to fulfill my bills selling my ring and bracelet. Therefore, jwellery would shield us from unfavourable events anytime in forthcoming days. Unfortunately, in this is not the case buying tickets for concert which is just a one time event in our life.
Secondly, jwellery is considered as an object to enhance one’s beauty be it male or female. To be more clear, jwellery has also the religious significance. Likewise, makeup has less to do with outer appearance however in reality it is the jwellery that makes people’s look complete. To cite an example, both married men and women wear ring on ring finger which symbolizes they are commited to a relationship. Not only this, they also have necklace to emphasize their marriage. Whilst, getting program ticket is not worth it as this merely provide entertainment to people for short period. Once the money is used for buying ticket, this cannot be undone. Hence, we should be mindful of the ways to spend our money .
As we can see, receiving sum as a present is always welcoming since it is of great use in preventing us from awful situation. Nevertheless, we should be careful while spending it.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 191, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ose to buy ornament or ticket of concert if someday I receive enough cash as a pr...
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Line 3, column 440, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'necklaced'.
Suggestion: necklaced
...tionship. Not only this, they also have necklace to emphasize their marriage. Whilst, ge...
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Line 3, column 713, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...e mindful of the ways to spend our money . As we can see, receiving sum as a pres...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, hence, however, if, likewise, look, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, while, i feel, to start with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1820.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 394.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.6192893401 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45527027702 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63075130476 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.571065989848 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 585.0 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 25.7951798666 48.9658058833 53% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 79.1304347826 100.406767564 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1304347826 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.34782608696 5.45110844103 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.18188106557 0.236089414692 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.055564203965 0.076458572812 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0473415722629 0.0737576698707 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118820992346 0.150856017488 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0688043869603 0.0645574589148 107% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.9 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.22 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.81 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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