young people nowadays do not give enough time to helping their communities
Some people would deem that the young contribute greatly to their communities, but others claim that they do not care enough about helping their societies. I am among the people believing that young people nowadays spend less time in order to aid their communities in that not only do oceans of entertainments and technologies prevent them to feel less concern about their societies, but they also need to focus on some important aspects of their life to build a proper future.
The first reason for my propensity toward this issue is that plentiful hobbies inhibit the young to look much deeper at social activities and their benefits. The fact of the matter is that by the galloping rate of progressing technology, young people have been surged by the huge amount of attractive entertainments. For example, nowadays lots of the young have been joined in social networks such as Instagram, Facebook, Telegram to name but a few. Passage of time cannot be sensed, when young people are sharing their photos or comments. In fact, they have a tendency to participate in a virtual social activity such as creating a campaign to preserve the environment rather than doing a real activity like taking garbage from their environment. They are willing to do the easiest way to help their communities by liking a post about it on Instagram or joining a page in Telegram related to mentioned subjects. It is the nature of adolescence to choose the most comfortable way.
Another point which should be mentioned here is that due to complex and difficult life condition, young people need to spend time to prepare themselves for their future job and new responsibilities. It is crystal clear that should one have a prosperous life, he will get a high academic degree since competition for finding a job has been really overriding. To get a better chance to seize any career opportunity, they require to well-prepared and well-experienced. With this in mind, they will have less time to think about their responsibility toward their communities. Hence, there is no blame for them, if they cannot take part in different social activities.
By taking account all the aforementioned reasons, one might come to the conclusion that the young care less about assisting their communities since their life has been replete with lots of entertainments. In addition, they need to put their effort to build their future, so they have less time to participate in helping their society. It is highly recommended that besides other their activities, the young assign certain time in order to join in social activities to create better condition life for every person in their country.
- TPO 1 85
- young people nowadays do not give enough time to helping their communities 78
- Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave. 73
- TPO 25 80
- A/D: people care more about public recognition than about money. Even if no more money is given, public recognition still make people work harder. 40
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, hence, if, look, really, so, well, for example, in addition, in fact, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 70.0 52.1666666667 134% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2220.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 443.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01128668172 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58776254615 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87786747137 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.523702031603 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 690.3 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 58.6607748431 48.9658058833 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.588235294 100.406767564 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0588235294 20.6045352989 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.11764705882 5.45110844103 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.383940706051 0.236089414692 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.125427641535 0.076458572812 164% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0988640428147 0.0737576698707 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.264783275446 0.150856017488 176% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.108089460478 0.0645574589148 167% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 11.7677419355 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 58.1214874552 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 10.002688172 185% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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