To choose own business or franchise
The reading mentioned that starting our own business is more risky compared to buying a franchise from already established brand company. The professor suggests that even if buying a franchise is less risky, there are several disadvantages involved in this process.
Firstly, professor mentioned about the recent study which calls a doubt on buying a franchise license. Study suggests that brand companies are forcing their franchise owners to buy very specific goods and services which are highly expensive in the competitive market. Moreover, franchise owners aren't allowed to buy similar kind of goods and services which are available at cheaper rate in the market.
Secondly, franchise owners are supposed to pay 6% of their sales profit to their parent company in compensation to the advertisement of products. However, one flaw in this data is brand companies are advertising their own products and not their franchise owners' business.
Thirdly, the most important factor, before considering to buy franchise license, is security because it is less risky to buy a franchise than starting independent business. But, passage doesn't discuss about the other option available. People, who are willing to do the business, can also look into buying other independent business. The study has reflected positive impact of this option. As per this study, the business can grow twice in four years if people buy the already established independent business.
In sum, professor suggested various flaws into the reading passage and described the alternative options available to people who are willing to take risk and want to try their venture.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 296, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: aren't
...tive market. Moreover, franchise owners arent allowed to buy similar kind of goods an...
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Line 3, column 310, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[2]
Message: Did you mean 'buying'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'allow' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: buying
...oreover, franchise owners arent allowed to buy similar kind of goods and services whic...
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Line 7, column 44, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[3]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'considering buying'.
Suggestion: considering buying
...rdly, the most important factor, before considering to buy franchise license, is security because ...
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Line 7, column 187, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...ting independent business. But, passage doesnt discuss about the other option availabl...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, look, moreover, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 10.4613686534 124% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 5.04856512141 40% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 7.30242825607 68% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 12.0772626932 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 22.412803532 67% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 30.3222958057 106% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 5.01324503311 40% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1396.0 1373.03311258 102% => OK
No of words: 257.0 270.72406181 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.43190661479 5.08290768461 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.00390054096 4.04702891845 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73423767358 2.5805825403 106% => OK
Unique words: 140.0 145.348785872 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.544747081712 0.540411800872 101% => OK
syllable_count: 433.8 419.366225166 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.55342163355 109% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 3.25607064018 0% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.23620309051 61% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 13.0662251656 99% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 21.2450331126 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.3716343402 49.2860985944 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.384615385 110.228320801 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7692307692 21.698381199 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.76923076923 7.06452816374 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.27373068433 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.194392702617 0.272083759551 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0728591592998 0.0996497079465 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0682577810812 0.0662205650399 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110092229974 0.162205337803 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0763513738721 0.0443174109184 172% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 13.3589403974 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 53.8541721854 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.0289183223 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.21 12.2367328918 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.7 8.42419426049 103% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 63.6247240618 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.498013245 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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