Directions: Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically,an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words.
Question:
National government can take a variety of actions to help protect the natural environment. Which ONE of the following three actions do you think is MOST important for a nation's government to take to protect the natural environment and why?
-Fund research to develop environmentally friendly energy sources, such as solar or wind power
-Preserve natural places such as forests and protect native wildlife species (animals) that live there
-Pass and enforce laws to prevent the pollution of air and water by big companies and industries
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
As far as I am concerned, finding a new way to produce environmentally friendly energy sources would be essential to protect the natural environment. Because if we can solve the energy problem, other problems discussed could be solved naturally.
First, we cannot reproduce the current fossil energy, whose emission after burning is also harmful to the environment. The energy from solar energy or wind power will not produce any harmful components to the environment. Furthermore, the harvesting ratio of those energy sources is still low, meaning if we can improve the harvesting ratio, the total body of energy could be huge. And the energy prices would no longer be a problem for us.
Second, with new environmentally friendly energy sources, we can reduce the activities that might threaten the wildlife species. We do not need extra resources from nature. For example, in the rural areas of many countries, people would cut down trees to make meals or keep their houses warm. We can eliminate these behaviors if we have new energy sources because the new sources of energy would be much cheaper. Being able to reproduce them in large quantities, people would tend to use them instead of the low-efficient fire energy from the woods. In this way, the forest habitats for the wildlife could be preserved. If we can leverage solar power or other forms of recycling energy, the problem of protecting wildlife would be easier.
Third, the new type of energy can also help to tackle the harmful pollution from companies and industries. Many methods to reduce pollution are less favorable to the companies due to their high costs. For example, we can use electricity to disintegrate poisonous gases before emitting them. Yet the costs for this method are too high, and the companies are reluctant to do that. If we could produce the electricity from new types of environmentally friendly energy sources in large quantities and at cheap prices, the previous concerns would no longer exist. Since the cost of treating the pollution would be much lower, the companies and industries would be more willing to do it.
In summary, if we can solve the energy problem, the other two problems could be solved naturally.
- Directions Read the question below You have 30 minutes to plan write and revise your essay Typically an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words Question National government can take a variety of actions to help protect the natural environme 52
- Directions Read the question below You have 30 minutes to plan write and revise your essay Typically an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words Question National government can take a variety of actions to help protect the natural environme 3
- Directions Read the question below You have 30 minutes to plan write and revise your essay Typically an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words Question National government can take a variety of actions to help protect the natural environme 3
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, if, second, so, still, third, for example, in summary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 10.4613686534 153% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 26.0 5.04856512141 515% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 9.0 7.30242825607 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 12.0772626932 25% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 22.412803532 112% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 30.3222958057 132% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 5.01324503311 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1854.0 1373.03311258 135% => OK
No of words: 368.0 270.72406181 136% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03804347826 5.08290768461 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37987740619 4.04702891845 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7186899071 2.5805825403 105% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 145.348785872 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.489130434783 0.540411800872 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 583.2 419.366225166 139% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 3.25607064018 154% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 1.25165562914 479% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.51434878587 198% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 2.5761589404 194% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 13.0662251656 153% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 21.2450331126 85% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.1824486328 49.2860985944 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.7 110.228320801 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4 21.698381199 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.95 7.06452816374 56% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 4.19205298013 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 4.33554083885 231% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 4.45695364238 179% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0409189263289 0.272083759551 15% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0161286410431 0.0996497079465 16% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0167553532683 0.0662205650399 25% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0290894212234 0.162205337803 18% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00847229437176 0.0443174109184 19% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 13.3589403974 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 53.8541721854 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.0289183223 93% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 12.2367328918 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.0 8.42419426049 95% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 63.6247240618 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.498013245 88% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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