There were varied onions about whether to allow or not the television advertisements related to children, especially those aged between two to five. If I were asked, I would definitely disagree with the blanket ban opinion of completely not allowing such commercials. I feel so mainly because of two reasons which will be discussed in the subsequent paragraphs.
Firstly, we can all agree that those commercials will also be watched by parents of kids. Such commercials are really informative, by providing them a platform to help know what types of different products are present in the market for their children. Drawing from my own experience, my uncle aunt have a kid aged 4 years. He is immensely drawn towards using a smart phone and really stubborn, but naturally they were really reluctant to give him the smartphone since there were afraid of the bad things in it. Fortunately one day, while watching TV, they came across this advertisement of a product which talks about a smart phone look alike product but not really a smart phone, specially designed for kids. This smart phone when used by a kid gives them a feeling that they were indeed using a real smart phone but in reality it will not have features of it like internet, camera etc. However, it was successful in positively fooling the kids for good and making them use it. However, they get bored of it since it does not have any features, which means bored of smart phones as a whole, eventually leading to abandoning ‘smart phones’. The advertisement was tactfully designed, however, in making this fact obscure to kids, but at the same time, obvious for parents.
Second, it was true that kids will be easily influenced by anything, especially TV and advertisements, eventually making them do bad things. However, as my personal opinion stands, it is not very difficult for parents to exercise discretion mainly in case of kids in age band of two to five and making them watch only good things. My personal experience is a compelling example for this. During my childhood, I used to watch lot of TV and so did my younger brother who was 4 at that time. But when my parents have clearly instructed me to keep him from watching potentially influencing advertisements and other programs. We were really successful in it since we were able to switch off TV or change the channel during such things without him saying anything. Of course, it was definitely not possible always to do this but it was nevertheless sufficient.
To sum up, in the light of aforementioned reasons and instances discussed, I feel that there is no need to naively ban all the advertisements which seem to direct towards kids because that way we might also lose the informative ones and additionally, it is not difficult these days, to control what kids watch on TV.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 998, Rule ID: BORED_OF[1]
Message: Did you mean 'bored with'?
Suggestion: bored with
...d making them use it. However, they get bored of it since it does not have any features,...
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Line 3, column 1059, Rule ID: BORED_OF[1]
Message: Did you mean 'bored with'?
Suggestion: bored with
...does not have any features, which means bored of smart phones as a whole, eventually lea...
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Line 3, column 1262, Rule ID: OBVIOUS_FOR[1]
Message: The adjective obvious is normally used with 'to': 'obvious to parents'.
Suggestion: obvious to parents
... obscure to kids, but at the same time, obvious for parents. Second, it was true that kids will...
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Line 5, column 157, Rule ID: PERSONAL_OPINION_FRIENDSHIP[1]
Message: Use simply 'opinion'.
Suggestion: opinion
...king them do bad things. However, as my personal opinion stands, it is not very difficult for pa...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, look, nevertheless, really, second, so, while, i feel, of course, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 10.4613686534 220% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 5.04856512141 158% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 7.30242825607 219% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 13.0 12.0772626932 108% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 22.412803532 259% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 30.3222958057 211% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 5.0 5.01324503311 100% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2346.0 1373.03311258 171% => OK
No of words: 484.0 270.72406181 179% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.84710743802 5.08290768461 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69041575982 4.04702891845 116% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83863545382 2.5805825403 110% => OK
Unique words: 250.0 145.348785872 172% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.51652892562 0.540411800872 96% => OK
syllable_count: 730.8 419.366225166 174% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 3.25607064018 522% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 8.23620309051 12% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.51434878587 198% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 2.5761589404 272% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 13.0662251656 153% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 21.2450331126 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.1617004646 49.2860985944 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.3 110.228320801 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.2 21.698381199 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.75 7.06452816374 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 4.33554083885 277% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.135397722061 0.272083759551 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0444425534373 0.0996497079465 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0374861619383 0.0662205650399 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0983677336786 0.162205337803 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0533155382718 0.0443174109184 120% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 13.3589403974 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 53.8541721854 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.0289183223 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.15 12.2367328918 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.09 8.42419426049 96% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 63.6247240618 157% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.498013245 110% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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