integrate tpo 46
The material discusses the concept of using the electronic medical record system instead of the paper form. While the reading looks at the topic from one perspective the listening challenges certain points outlined in the reading passage.
Firstly, the reading details the points in regard to this topic, namely the saving the medical record electronically is cost-effective. Another point worth nothing, electronic medical record prevents medical mistakes. One final points, electronic medical records can help gathering large amounts of patients’ records.
Conversely, the listening challenges the points. One specific contradiction is doctors who adopt electronic medical record still have to keep the paper records for a legal purposes. They still have to pay for paper. Ina addition to that, using the electronic records cannot eliminate errors given that doctors still using pens and paper on examining the patients, then the data will be entered to the computers by technicians. Finally, because of the privacy laws
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 109, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ecord system instead of the paper form. While the reading looks at the topic from one...
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Line 2, column 273, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[5]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to gather' or 'gather'.
Suggestion: to gather; gather
...ts, electronic medical records can help gathering large amounts of patients' records...
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Line 3, column 108, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...adiction is doctors who adopt electronic medical record still have to keep the pa...
^^
Line 3, column 465, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ns. Finally, because of the privacy laws
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
conversely, finally, first, firstly, if, look, still, then, while, in regard to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 10.4613686534 29% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 5.04856512141 59% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 7.30242825607 14% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 12.0772626932 25% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 4.0 22.412803532 18% => OK
Preposition: 14.0 30.3222958057 46% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 5.01324503311 40% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 877.0 1373.03311258 64% => OK
No of words: 155.0 270.72406181 57% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.65806451613 5.08290768461 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.52844152537 4.04702891845 87% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81532893338 2.5805825403 109% => OK
Unique words: 97.0 145.348785872 67% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.625806451613 0.540411800872 116% => OK
syllable_count: 270.9 419.366225166 65% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.55342163355 109% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 3.25607064018 31% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.23620309051 36% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 13.0662251656 77% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 15.0 21.2450331126 71% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 51.961620452 49.2860985944 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.7 110.228320801 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.5 21.698381199 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.9 7.06452816374 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.09492273731 73% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.530705391947 0.272083759551 195% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.206494820435 0.0996497079465 207% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.153107163857 0.0662205650399 231% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.349519855407 0.162205337803 215% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0973757854708 0.0443174109184 220% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 13.3589403974 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.79 53.8541721854 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.0289183223 93% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.25 12.2367328918 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.68 8.42419426049 115% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 63.6247240618 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.7273730684 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.498013245 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.2008830022 71% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:
para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3
Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).
Don't need a conclusion paragraph.
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More content wanted.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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